PaintedDiary

There used to be a time
when only your smile brightened my day,
now your used to my smile,
in every way.

There used to be a time
people would smile at us,
as we walked down a street together,
now we walk down separate paths,
like sister and brother.

There used to be a time
when love conquered all,
and eased my pain,
now the love is used up,
no more sunshine; only rain.

There used to be a time
you would hold me close,
tell me you love me,
and every problem would disappear,
now only your lies I fear.

There used to be a time
when you were true,
God knows I loved you,
stuck by you,
and would do anything for you.

There will be a time
when you think back and remember,
when I used to say I love you,
and shed a tear, not for one,
but for us two.

Since you again
have found someone new,
please do not come back for me,
the person you have only used.

drofdar

Excellently written Kim, I like how you used manipulation as a key theme in this one...not many people can write something about manipulation and make it sound like music to the eyes and mind. I hits deep and truthful and really shows how evil manipulation is. Again excellently done and keep it up!!

Ed

erikestabrook

I liked this, it draws you in,
seems very real too

Abae

Know that pain..........great write.

PaintedDiary

Thank you Ed, Erik, and Abae for taking precious time to read and for your encouraging comments. Yes, this is very real. I thought that I would not post, cuz it is an "elementary" write so to speak, and I thought about spicing it up. When I started to do that, I realized, "simple" is better for this piece. Again, thank you so much. Take care.

Painted

Sartor

The melancoly of a deserted love is always an emotional subject to write about. What once was is now a "Used to be" can be heart wrenching. I enjoyed your writing and wish you well.
Sartor

PaintedDiary

Thank you so much Sartor for taking time to read and then comment. Yes, been down the road, and it is heart wrenching. However, many lessons were learned. Your comment was most inspiring, and I thank you again!! Take Care.

Painted

Amzy

Not bad, Painted Kim, not bad at all. Your style works quite well for this beautifully melonchaly piece. There are two spots that detract from the great content, however. The repetition of the word streets is one, you have enough repetition in the first line of each stanza, don't abuse it.
There are enough close synonyms for "street".

The second, is here:
As the only verse with the abbbb rhyme scheme, it interrupts the flow.

PaintedDiary