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Whisper from a star to a cloud
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Whisper from a star to a cloud
I'm not alone in defeatest attitude,
always looking for something new,
You tell me I'm deranged unless,
the foots on the other shoe,
I've been crying from my heart to an empty floor,
I've been crying for the death of love,
or love of death?
I can't take it anymore,
I'm just a shell among a sea,
I'm looking and looking but no ones picking me,
How much longer until I go down?
was the whisper from the star to a cloud,
You can match me with anything,
I'm not afraid to take it,
If you want smiles I can fake it,
anything will do, I still burn for you,
Why must I burn for you?
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Originally Posted by erikestabrook
I'm just a shell among a sea,
I'm looking and looking but no ones picking me,
anything will do, I still burn for you,
Why must I burn for you?
Dear Erik,
This was a beautiful exchange amongst two celestial neighbors. The lines I have highlighted are masterful in craft, and their placement in the poem was superb. The title captured me first, then the whimsical conversation is encapsulating! To give the touch of humanistic qualities, made the poem radiate and illuminate like our stars above. I absolutely love stars, the universe, and such, as you already know...so this poem fed my soul with the light it projects. Awesome Erik, and thank you for sharing!
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Erik!! Hehehe this was toooo cute! The title was definitely catching - made me wonder what wonders our Erik was gonna produce this time =) Even after everything of yours that I've read, I'm still inspired and totally in awe of your amazing style! The images you conjure up and the expressions you create, just completely draw me in to the story! Would give that lovely little star a hug if I could just reach it! ^_^
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love your myspace page serenity I couldn't do many things on it unfortunately,
but it great learning a couple things bout you like your job and that you are married wow
also just upon a glance it was a great testiment to idividuality
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lolol erik, not quite married but it does put an end to those pesky private messages - "hey sexy whats up add my msn, i've got a webcam " i hate those things! ehehehe good to hear about the star
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but it does put an end to those pesky private messages - "hey sexy whats up add my msn, i've got a webcam