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Old 07-03-2007, 01:12 AM
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A Young Love
stay in these feelings,
they mark my desire,

stay young in love,
but let it grow further,

All the while keep the way,
that you know her,

If love reached me today,
I'd welcome it kindly,

I'd fall right away,
and smile delightfully,

Who knows the age of love?
All know when it meets your heart,
its a fuller sense of elation,
if my love continues to age,
then I'll finally love enough to make a difference,

to you the young at heart,
feel free to live in bliss,
when young love reaches the heart,
it consumes the senses,

Let it in, the transforming love,
that while is young,
whose to measure the time so special?

stay young love,
so that love will build and frame,
itself upon every lonely soul.



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Old 07-03-2007, 02:03 AM
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I love this part :
stay young love,
so that love will build and frame,
itself upon every lonely soul.

Great job :]
not really structured...but I like it :] free flowing makes me happy
*huggles* great job!



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Old 07-03-2007, 02:06 AM
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structure I could've but it would've lost some meaning,
glad you like it,



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i agree with the structure thing usually but with this poem i think you used the free structure very nicely. i love the way i saw specific visions of emotions and love scenes instead of blurriness.



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thanks lousianagal, I'm glad you'd agree with me on the intent of this poem,
its not on one topic exactly but basically all about young love so I don't think I went to far ahead or strayed too far behind, if I gave someone blurriness from a poem I'd feel horrible I only have acouple poems with that intention



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oh i'm so sorry. i must have written it wrong. i meant that your poem was clear and very well written. sorry bout the confusion



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you said you saw it clear, I was just saying i'm relieved that their was no blurriness in the poem,



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oh ok. lol



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