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Old 04-09-2007, 10:35 PM
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Enamored I, a smitten soul,
because of feelings, once taboo,
with a transcendent love I stroll,
walking the path of love with you.

Tranquility, your silken voice,
when softly speaking love to me,
I'm left with galaxies of choice
and gleaming rainbow potpourri.

A crystal moon of silver blue,
painted our bodies argent white.
Emotions that, for me were new,
swirled in the magic of that night.

On damp and tangled sheets we lay,
beneath the silvered lunar beams.
Amid sweet scent of love's bouquet,
at last I realize my dreams.

See now, my Eagle soars aloft,
'tis love for you, in regal flight,
revealing layers sweet and soft,
of secrets on our wedding night.

When Wisdom paints my hair in gray,
my aged hands, will hold your face.
Beyond the grave our love shall stay
and we shall sing, in Love's embrace.





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Ms Jacquii, I believe this is publishable. Please let me know. Thanks.

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Fantastic and oozing of steady, knowing, complete love that has no doubts, but will only get stronger and surer….absolutely beautiful emotions prevail throughout this work. It is a joy to read!

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P.S. my aged hands, (the comma isn’t needed here)



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Thank you Ms Nomad for reading and commenting. Yes, this is a very special piece, and Sartor and Ms Jacquii, gave me the ok, on the poem, and then post. Wanted a few more opinions, and I believe this is a finished piece for me. Thanks for all your help.

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it's good....
and quite image-fulish.
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you're lucky to have found this kind of love.

my prayer for you is that it'll never fade, and as my friend says...Love will never fail.
make it true :]



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Beautifully written
from a deep soul.

Thanks Kim...

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it's good....
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Dear Ms Mango ,

Thank you for taking precious time to read and comment. I am grateful, and your comment brought tears to my eyes. Thank you so much...

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