Dear Jims Inn,
This was a great story Jim. I read it over 2 times now. My heart goes out to Mel. A true story to boot. I love the way the story lends itself to the reader drawing his or her own conclusions. I really like the fact that the brother is the narrator is very fitting. Allot of ways I can relate this story to my own in my family and others may also. You have a way to keep the interest, feel the emotion, and tell the story. If one were to blink they will miss every word of this great story. Yes a few places could use some tightening up, otherwise it is a great as it is Jims Inn. For me you have to capture me early or from the first few sentences as a story writer myself, and you did that and more. The title alone will capture anyone. I know you are one to watch. Great job.
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