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nomadicrhymer · 10-31-2007, 12:15 AM

Constant waves of reprimanding
all distinct lack understanding.

Restless seeking in my soul,
Restless seeking will not wither

Hello Joy...I like this poem...the confusion, and seeking to understand life and it's twists and turns. I feel though, that the second line could read "All unkempt AND undefined". Just a suggestion...I feel that it keeps the count of the beat throughout the stanza that way.

Very nice!

Nomad

10-31-2007, 12:15 AM	#2 (permalink)
nomadicrhymer Moderator Name: Therese Gender: Location: Claremont, CA nomadicrhymer's Mood: Last Online: 04-05-2012 11:54 AM	Re: Puzzling Extremes Constant waves of reprimanding all distinct lack understanding. Restless seeking in my soul, Restless seeking will not wither Hello Joy...I like this poem...the confusion, and seeking to understand life and it's twists and turns. I feel though, that the second line could read "All unkempt AND undefined". Just a suggestion...I feel that it keeps the count of the beat throughout the stanza that way. Very nice! Nomad
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