[SarahNSH]

Hello!

Well, I enjoyed the first part and you grabbed my attention with the beginning story of this so I thought that I'd check out the second part. I was not disappointed either! I really do enjoy this and how your expanding upon the story... I do have a suggestion though for one of the sentences that I read: Creatures (if ever was) I thought to be extinct, not extant. -

In my opinion the part in the parenthesis kind of makes the sentence an awkward read and I would maybe suggest removing it because I feel like it interrupts the flow of the sentence when reading it. Or, you could reword it and here is my suggestion for rewording the sentence since I don't believe you need to repeat creatures again since it was mentioned in the sentence before:

Creatures of myth and folklore were my preferred genre when reading as a child. I thought them to be extinct, not extant.

But, of course, this is just a suggestion and completely up to you. I was wondering why the vampire came to her sobbing... was it because the vampire knew that she was going to change her and what that would do to our main character? Or, was it that she finally got to meet the woman she was haunting and the feelings from finally meeting her? Definitely had me interested in that and also if this vampire will return and if the main character will stop having the haunting visions/dreams now that she has meet her spector.

Anywho, all of this to say that I really did enjoy this and I'll be following along for your next installment too! I'm also wondering where Dr. O'Hara will play into the next part or if she'll come back into her life again after what has happened. Keep up the great work and keep on writing away!