Creative Traditional:

[Sartor]

Moonlight
Casting white light
Upon the shadowed lawn
While peeking through the leafy limbs
Midnight

[Moonchild]

Lovely Sartor!



~JASMINE~

Blooming
jasmines perfume
summers midnight aura
as yellow petals kiss the moon
waxing.

© Karen Davies

[mangodroplet]

WOW nice poems everyone!
I think I'll try one :]

Believe
when all seems lost
when all is without hope
when all others give up trying
hang on

[mangodroplet]

hmm. another one?


Forgive
easy to say,
but always hard to do.
It is hard to cast off the hurt,
but try.


sorry. I've been having a hard time forgiving and talking to someone...

[Bitter Irony]

The bed
where once we slept
no longer holds your shape...
did you think my heart would hold it
longer?

First appeared in Modern English Tanka - Vol. 2, No. 2 . (covering my copy-righted behind!)

Cinquain are really an amazing form. They force you to think through your ideas and choose your words carefully. I like your saxaphone, Painted Diary! Sartor--"full moon" was beautiful! (And so are everyone else's! I was just a ditz and posted after reading the first page.)

[PaintedDiary]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Bitter Irony

The bed
where once we slept
no longer holds your shape...
did you think my heart would hold it
longer?

Cinquain are really an amazing form. They force you to think through your ideas and choose your words carefully. I like your saxaphone, Painted Diary! Sartor--"full moon" was beautiful! (And so are everyone else's! I was just a ditz and posted after reading the first page.)

Bitter Irony! That was so amazing...to think...yes....no longer holds your shape...just wow! Thank you for reading my Saxquain also, lol...you are are so right about this form...Cinquains do force one to express often like not before. Additionally, word selection based on syllable count may seem restrictive for some, however, it forces one to creative heights! Best of luck on your mag as well!

Beautiful Cinquains everyone!!!!!

{{{~~**Painted**~~}}

[Curtis Spider Lee]

Forever and always Mr.Sartor, I'll always enjoy your works. This one you have written here, is one more reason why!

[Carmody]

The Cinquain is a form that encourages the poet to trim all fat, leaving only the lean and meaningful words to convey the theme. You write it beautifully!

[SuzyQ]

I've read through all the pages of this particular thread and there are some awesome Cinquain posted here. Sartor (where is this poet?) writes beautifully... so polished. I will have to try my hand at one soon.

SuzyQ

[tham]

wow-we
those were just great
wish i could do that too
but i just can't do it right now
oh well