Creative Traditional:

[mangodroplet]

The cacophony-
crashing, screeching, screaming
echoes in the alley.

hmm.
maybe a better vision...

The cacophony-
clashing, screeching, yellling
echoes in the alley.

THERE. now it's less than 17 syllables

[Jeez]

mango,

Yes... yes ' can
hear it...

' have heard it
echoing in the
laneways alleys.


for the read.

[mangodroplet]

Thanks so much for your comment Jeez!
*huggles*
YOU ARE AMAZING!

[Bear]

I have heard that many times in the chicago alleys excellent write Mango
hugs kisses
bear

[mangodroplet]

Thanks Bear...
hmmmm this poem builds up, and then seems to mellow out..
all in 3 lines O.o

[Ariono-jovan Labu]

defiantely brought the street ku` close... can truly relate artist. one-

[mangodroplet]

Thanks for reading and commenting Ariono :]
*huggles*
Glad you related to it...

[PaintedDiary]

Dear Ms Mango ,

Nice layering, and strong visual. You scribed it as if right outside my window, and I am felling it, and hearing right now! Awesome write, and thank you for sharing this little piece of paradise.

~~~~~KIMBERLY~~~~:< (@

[mangodroplet]

Dear Mrs (almost!) Kim!


*huggles*
thanks for commenting...
I'm glad you felt it....

[nomadicrhymer]

Hey Ms. Mango - I love this little one because it's almost comforting...if you live in the city, although sometimes the noise gets annoying...you would wonder if something was wrong if it wasn't there...so it's almost like you can stop and be aware that all is well...as it resonates in the alley...and with your heart...home.

Nomad