Creative Traditional:

[Moonchild]

CRYSTAL FUJI ~ PANTOUM

Snow-capped crystal mountain sleek,
talons grip your pinnacled peak.
Sun reflected Wuthering Height,
turquoise skyline shadowed bright.

Talons grip your pinnacled peak,
below you glistens a hushed creek.
Turquoise skyline shadowed bright,
rocky mountain magic white.

Below you glistens a hushed creek,
frozen in cold mid winter bleak.
Rocky mountain magic white
silhouetting eagles in flight.

Frozen in cold mid winter bleak,
there stands Fuji, majestic meek
silhouetting eagles in flight,
a sun reflected freedom plight.

There stands Fuji, majestic meek,
natures beauty frosty sleek.
A sun reflected freedom plight,
chiaroscuro of Heaven's light.

Natures beauty frosty sleek,
resembling monumental mystique.
chiaroscuro of Heaven's light,
a stunning primitive colossal sight.

© Karen Davies

[KayaOtah]

Wow, Fuji was beautify more by you... It was not as beautiful beofre you wrote this... *smiles*

[Moonchild]

Thanks so much Kyanata.
Fuji is beautiful with the snow all over it don't ya think?
Glad ya liked this poem of mine(hugs)

[Jims Inn]

hi moonchild...

a stunning example of this form of poetry ... it would have got a prefect 10 from me but ...

last line last stanza ... three adjectives? = purple prose ... still a great poem ...


luv ya

jim

[Bear]

magnificent beautiful discriptive penning Moonchild a nature poem at its best
hugs kisses
bear

[nomadicrhymer]

LOL @ Jim - so strict!

Moonchild this was definitely a lovely breath of fresh air first time around...now that I read it again it seems even more beautiful. Mt. Fuji deserves all the accolades we can present to it. A fabulous Pantoum...I love the form...and have to write another...myself.

Thanks for posting, Moonchild!

Nomad