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Old 11-11-2007, 09:45 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Moonlight writhes on a tempestuous sea,
A sister tonight to my own desire.
How this hunger burns in my veins like fire;
Only one lover can satisfy me.
Where is he now? What can possibly be
More appealing then my breast to admire
With his touch, his kiss? I would retire
With so much more than a memory
If the angels smiled and by some chance he
Could reach past the distance to reacquire
Those lusty old feelings, sure to inspire
A midnight visit to my fantasy.
In dreams would I seek my satisfaction
With mental sexual interaction.
 

Old 11-15-2007, 10:16 PM   #2 (permalink)
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lol.
wow, a little more mature for my age, but I loved the words you chose and your rhymes :]
great job!
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Old 11-15-2007, 11:28 PM   #3 (permalink)
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i am not sure whatthe rules ar ehere - there doesn't seem to be an adult forum except for humor so I am not sure how much of my erotic poetry i can post - how erotic it can be and still be ok.......this is quite mild compared to some......though all my erotic poetry is tasteful and non porn.....
 

Old 11-16-2007, 01:53 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Wow, that's a beautiful piece. I remember having many nights of sexual fantasies just like that. I like your use of words such as "Mental Sexual Interaction," love how you included the mental part. Sounds like the best kind of sexual interaction for deep thinkers like us.
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Old 11-17-2007, 01:10 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Hi Beki,

I think your poem is sensual without being smutty and deserves to be read in any forum. I enjoyed it, in a fantasy sort of way, as you undoubtedly expressed true emotions of desire and longing. I became a little concerned, after reading the first line, that it might be a bit cliche but you quickly dispelled that thought as you drew me in deeper with your words. (I'm not a fan of capitalising the start of every line in this structure of poem either.)

Captivating piece and I hope you are permitted to post more like this.

Terence
 

Old 11-18-2007, 06:36 AM   #6 (permalink)
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NO! NO!
I didn't mean to scare you!
You're allowed to post anything you want, as long as it does not go into the realms of pornography...
xD
lol.
no, really,don't be afraid to post your work!
GAH! i'm sorry!
just *ZIP* erase what I said earlier!
 

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Old 11-18-2007, 06:53 AM   #7 (permalink)
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you didn't scare me - it was an honest question - there don't seem to be posted rules but I don't want to break any understood ones I am not privy to as a new member...I guess I will post as I choose and trust your forum moderators to stop me if I cross a line
 

Old 11-21-2007, 01:58 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Beki...this is a beautifully written and sensual piece...erotica for the mind...lovely! I have always loved sonnets and this fulfills all the expectations one has for a sonnet. Thanks for posting this gem, Beki!

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P.S. we do have a posting policy you can peruse at your leisure if you want to get caught up on what's allowed or what's not...but this is pretty tame compared to some...lol!

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Old 11-21-2007, 02:06 AM   #9 (permalink)
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I read it but i didn't get any sense for what is allowed in this way and what is not at AC we have many teen members and because of that we have an adults only forum but the only one I see here is for jokes or humor.....this is very tame for what i write too..that is why i thought it was ok to post it.....as i said i will trust you to tell me if i cross the line

there ar ea couple tankas in the emotional romantic forum you might want to read
 


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