Creative Traditional:

[JolieH]

Handful of Stars
~
I
held
a hand-
full of stars,
a palm of live wires,
glowing red like an x-ray
tiny fragments of light building energy
nudging, crevasses between fingers. Particles free
and
race
into
the night sky
shooting in reverse
to original position
taking wishes of the night from lovers' lips,
erased like a chalkboard ready to start a new day.

Fibonacci poem - doubled
Jolie H
December - 2007

[JolieH]

In reference to the above poem, I was thinking about the concept of doubling here. It doesn't work in real life, the spiral cannot continue like this, but I did use, "and" to continue. It wasn't intentional, but it helped in this case. This concept is new in poetry. I find it interesting. I think if it were formalized. This wouldn't be proper. Because the second spiral isn't complete - not really.

To illustrate:

If two sea shells were stacked on top of the other, the edge would be broke on the second shell.

I don't know - maybe I'm just thinking too much.

[Kit Carson]

It still works for me...but then I am not usually overly analytical nor mathmatical in my approach to reading poetry...sometimes I think as writers we look at things differently than we do as readers. It is very pleasing. Perhaps a space in between? The ending comma works to clue the reader in that it continues. One at a time for me.

[JolieH]

This is just an image... interesting how it's constructed. I decided to write about the stars. They are lovely and shining up there on a warm California night. Every poet writes something about stars, so I just imagined (pictured in my thought) what it would be like if I could collect them in my hand and hold them, but in the process, the stars wanted free and they escaped. I could see them racing home, and I thought about all the wishes people must have made as they were falling, but well, that stuff never worked for me anyway.
But it was possible within my imagination to see this image occur, so there is some truth to it. It's almost like a state of quantum reality - because going in reverse with mathematics is possible and there are such things as imaginary numbers and imaginary numbers are used in quantum physics. Awhile back, I was thinking about “Alice in Wonderland” and quantum reality, and I found other related studies. Kimberley knows that stuff, she says its candy.

One more thing, If I imagine just one star, it lifts me off the ground, and I can fly with it.
I'm wierd, a nerd actually. My daughter Victoria wants me to become a Nerd Fighter, so I agreed.

Check it out - Nerdfighters must watch the video

[reasonrhymer]

Jolie,

I like your poem and the new style you developed.

Now as long as "you" are flying with the stars and without the gravity of the earth (a high flying nerd star rider) And If the two sea shells were stacked on top of the other, the edge would "NOT: break cuz there would be now weight one upon the other, and that doesn't take quantum realities to figure out, just some good old physics.

So you can stack those shells anyway you like.

Have fun flying up there in the stars, I do that too, perhaps we meet on one someday.



Reasonrhymer

[JolieH]

lol,
Thanks George, I guess your right now that you mention it.
I'll be sure to ask for you next time I'm up there.

[MsJacquiiC]

JOLIE - I think this poem is quite magnificent actually - You introduced the Fibonacci Poetic style the other day and it's quite stunning to see it doubled - It actually seems to have taken on the shape of a rocket launcher of sorts. Like your shooting stars or some such (the shape anyway)

Then the content is simply on point. Interesting subject matter and approached with a fresh originality. I say 5 Stars!

Thanx for the sharing

Jacquii.

[Bitter Irony]

Amazing imagery! It was an interesting idea to double the fib. sequence. I especially enjoyed the first half of the poem; your description was very original.

~Bitter Irony