Creative Traditional:

[nomadicrhymer]

The Heart Of You

I will sift you like wheat
the chaff will fly
about the sky
your essence
remaining
your character straining
to prove
the truth of you.

You sing words of love
but your eyes cast
a different shadow
sideways
perusing
new sexy young things.

I will press you into fine wine
or you will be
no man of mine
the lies will drain away
staining the clay
like fresh blood
cutting
to the heart
of you.

nomadic rhymer

[Sally Roberts]

Nomad:

It would be a shame to keep this heartfelt poem untitled.
Might I suggest.. To The Heart in You.


I enjoyed this poem very much. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings

[deborahinwi]

Wow, lol! That's brutal, I love this! Direct with no punches pulled

[PaintedDiary]

Dear Nomad,

I love love love this. Strong, slightly abstract, speaks volumes, relateable, direct, and I love the free flowing style. Awesome, awesome!

Kim

[JolieH]

He deserved every word.
A flourishing crop gone to seed,
powdered truth, packaged like cool aid.
Just add water, and he yours.
You've sculpted the devil himself,
melted by a glass of wine.

[nomadicrhymer]

Sally, Deb, PD & Jolie...wow ladies, thanks for the overwhelming responses! Sally thanks for the name suggestion, and I'll ask Kim to please title it for me since I cannot edit that part. I added the name to the body, Kim. Thanks bunches.

I appreciate the comments and the time you all took to read this little ditty that I wrote in a jiffy .

Nomad
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[MsJacquiiC]

I sort of agree with DEBORAH's comment - The poem is BRUTAL indeed - but what I like about this write MS N - is that it get's to the crux of the hypocrisy within and just rips it out of there LOL - Such a wealth of truth that some would be scared of this type of no-holds-barred writing.

I thought the rhythm of your poem was just so succinct and crisp really - the way you composed the lines into such small stanzas just accentuates your words - not a word wasted in this scribe Poet! A very nice write!

My favorite lines:

The Following Text Is Quoted:

You sing words of love
but your eyes cast
a different shadow
sideways
perusing
new sexy young things.

I will press you into fine wine
or you will be
no man of mine

The 2nd stanza was just on fire! Then the follow-up "I will press you into fine wine..." That was FIERCE Girl! AWESOME write - Thanx for the share!

JAcquii.

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by JolieH

He deserved every word.
A flourishing crop gone to seed,
powdered truth, packaged like cool aid.
Just add water, and he yours.
You've sculpted the devil himself,
melted by a glass of wine.

Such a poetic response - caricature of inspiration
Motivated by strong words of truth!

Jacquii.

[nomadicrhymer]

Thanks Ms. J!! haha...I didn't think it was that bad, but maybe I'm too honest for my own good...why I'm single maybe? I just came back from Belize in a small village where Cheating is headlining every night and it's the first thing that sprang to my mind. It was a little too much and sad I must say to see that people have fallen into a rut and accept that stuff like that "is normal for a man"...not in my world! So, yes brutal honesty is the name of the game...for those who dare to play.

Nomad

[Bear]

Powerful direct passionate every line and stanza speaks volumes. It screams give me the respect and honor I deserve. beautifull penned Nomad
hugs kisses
bear