Creative Traditional:

[mangodroplet]

HOPE
in wait
unchanging

A mother's cries sound
but within her wailing
comes belief that she will see

"The trust, the faith, the thought of good."

hehe.......the author of this style's first poem was also about hope!
wah! just found out...haha. coolio
The Clarity Pyramid Website - Poems

[Jer4clarity]

First, for a first, this was brilliant! Not only did you follow, "to the tee" each aspect of the CP but you gave the word HOPE a life of its own with your spirit.

If it is true you are only fifteen then you are going places! Don't ever stop writing.

MY FAV:

The Following Text Is Quoted:

HOPE
in wait
unchanging

A mother's cries sound
but within her wailing
comes belief that she will see

"The trust, the faith, the thought of good."

My CP HOPE is wanning in your presence!


Jerry

[mangodroplet]

WOW!
I am in awe of Mr. I-created-the-clarity-pyramid!
haha....thanks for the compliment!
I try....:]
:bow:

Thank you ever so much, it means MUCHO MAS!
You really really like it?
AHH!
i could die and be happy right now

[Terence]

Hi, Anna, as I previously remarked, you have talent and much potential. I think the crux of this form is the second triplet, and you have tied all the pieces together really well with yours.

Terence

[mangodroplet]

wow....thanks for the insight Terence....
I am very thankful for your reading and commenting...
yes, i did think that the second triplet meant the most, and stories mean the most to me...so i figured i wanted a kinda story there.
thank!

[Bear]

Mango Magnificent penning you have captured hope, and you have capture what hope really is trust faith and thoughts of good excellent
hugs kisses
Bear

[mangodroplet]

Thanks Bear!
*huggles*

I hate the word good, personally, but i couldn't find anything else that would work right there and get it right. :]

[erikestabrook]

see sometimes the best of us comes out,
our wishes desires, can easily be someone elses however,

our poetic sight will always be reaching and in this case finding
the best in us and everyone

[PaintedDiary]

Ms Mango,

You captured the pure essence of the form and the message you wanted to convey in this piece. The second stanza is chilling, and it moved me so. Brilliant write Mango. Truly memorable, and beautifully executed. An excellent rating.

Kim

[mangodroplet]

Thanks Erik! Thanks PD!

I try....to capture what i'm feeling in my heart.
it gives me a certain exhilaration to capture what i want to say and fit it in a fixed form.
i feel so accomplished and happy :]

erik-what you say is so true...sometimes you need someone else to say it to know how to say it :]

PD- Thanks soo much for commenting and reading :] I always love it when you comment! mucho love :]