Creative Traditional:

[Jims Inn]

i saw my love carried away on a cloud to the palace of the gods
where the master of fate crowned her with a star
and set her image among the heavens where
chained to the sky her presence shadowed the very sun.
bringer of light, confronted by her beauty even aphrodite,
goddess of desire returned ashamed to olympus.

she wept and tears of amber fell staining the ground where i stood,
and i was angry when i found her stolen
so i seduced a caste of priests with gold and
married the moon to be near her
from there i made my attack on heaven
facing all the gods of terror, but not even death
that dreaded divinity dared to stop me.

finally i found my love and drove the spirits of the dead away
from their funeral games and caught her in an invisible net
with doors of brass where she renewed her virginity
in the river of forgetfulness and had no sense of sin.
hungering for travel we revolved in infinite and empty space
served by priestesses who lit misleading fires and sang erotic poetry.

thus we controlled the calender and to worship her
i brought her a wreath of stardust.
mystical bride of the gods, influenced by the love star venus
and libra lying east of the scorpion
who alone controls our destiny
guide us as we make love for eternity.

[Moonchild]

Oh wow I really enjoyed and liked this one.
Very imaginative and creative. I love mythology
and this was great stuff! Very magical and spellbinding.
Loved it

[Jims Inn]

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Originally Posted by Moonchild

Oh wow I really enjoyed and liked this one.
Very imaginative and creative. I love mythology
and this was great stuff! Very magical and spellbinding.
Loved it

hi karen ... do forgive me for responding to your post so late ... first of all i was having virus problems so i had to install a new anti-virus defender ... then for some weird reason i couldn't get logged in but ...

i am so happy to receive a critique ... i was beginning to think i was invisible ... don't know of this is sort of classified as bumping ... but "love trilogy... part one... fate was a daughter" is posted on the love forum ... why not have a read?

luv ya!

[Bear]

beautiful penning Jim emotional powerful love and a very creative write
handshakes
bear

[Jims Inn]

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Originally Posted by Bear

beautiful penning Jim emotional powerful love and a very creative write
handshakes
bear

thanx so much for your kind words thomas ...

do take a look ar part one which i posted on romantic poetry ... didn't really know my way around then ... it will put part two more into perspective ...