Creative Traditional:

[Sally Roberts]

If I could eat
the wild green sage
And fly
through the big gentle wood,
I'd rather be there
than here in this cage
If I could get out
then I would.

I'd fly
up so high
'till I reached the blue sky
And spread my wings
out so far,
If I had my freedom
that I wish that I'd have
Things would be better
than they are.

I look outside
the window to see,
The sky
so beautiful and clear,
If I had a choice
you know where I'd be
I'd rather
be out there
than in here.

If I had my freedom
I'd fly
with the wind,
And smell
the air fresh and clean
I'd also be there
with the trees that are rare
And the grass
in the meadow so green.

Just sitting here thinking
of things I could do,
And wishing
and dreaming this way,
If only
my wishes
would really come true,
I would have
my freedom
today.

[Jer4clarity]

Sally,

You've depicted the struggle of the chains of life so well. And the sky is so expansive. And all we need is "wings" to fly. But then there is your poetry which lifts us up with the power in your words into this freedom. Thanks for taking us there with you! My Fav:

The Following Text Is Quoted:

I'd rather be there
than here in this cage
If I could get out
then I would.

Jerry

[Sally Roberts]

Thank you very much Jer.

As usual your poetic responses are truly a work of art as well. I sit humbled by your words. It takes a lot of polishing to create an imagery of this statue I am happy to know you have felt the depths of this poem.

Blessings

[KayaOtah]

You wrote alot of poems regarding people's mistakes, yeah, children should be given more freedom, don't just lock them up, they will rust. *smiles*

[Nikos Tselepides]

Sally:

Excellent work. I liked how all stanzas are artful variations of the same basic thought.

Many thanks.

[JolieH]

I like this

"If I had my freedom
I'd fly
with the wind,
And smell
the air fresh and clean
I'd also be there
with the trees that are rare
And the grass
in the meadow so green."

So many poets experience this wish for freedom. I'm sure it is the constraints of life, but also the necessity for poets to see life from an ultimate height and sublime perspective.
You do that well Sally. I always look foreword to reading your posts.

[Sally Roberts]

Thanks everyone

KayaOtah... your comments was certainly uplifting. This poem can be deplicted from many different concepts. It's very interesting to read what others interpet it to be. Great one!

Nikos... Thanks so much for your most welcomed comment. It was greatly appreciated.

Jolie.... Thank you for taking the time to read my work and comment on it. I sit humbled.

Thanks everyone.
Blessings

[Kit Carson]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

I'd fly
up so high
'till I reached the blue sky
And spread my wings
out so far,
If I had my freedom
that I wish that I'd have
Things would be better
than they are.

Sally, if you had your wish would you be soaring on a dragon's back? I love the feelings that you bring forth in this. By the end I found myself wishing that for you.

[Sally Roberts]

Thanks Jer.

Ahhhh yes to soar in the wind on a dragon's back. To be so lucky to do that would be an exhilarating experience! I would definitely accept his hospitality.

(Personal note) If one knows the rules of an OBE (Out of body experience) one can do just that.

Blessings

[PaintedDiary]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Nikos Tselepides

Sally:

Excellent work. I liked how all stanzas are artful variations of the same basic thought.

Many thanks.

Dear Sally,

This is what I am was going to express, and Nikos did it lovely. artful variations of the same concept! I love these lines, well I loved all of them however......

I look outside
the window to see,
The sky
so beautiful and clear,
If I had a choice
you know where I'd be
I'd rather
be out there
than in here.

If I had my freedom
I'd fly
with the wind,
And smell
the air fresh and clean
I'd also be there
with the trees that are rare
And the grass
in the meadow so green.

those stanzas really hone in on the longing, the wanting, the I can see Freedom before me. This stanza was the opening....

If I could eat
the wild green sage
And fly
through the big gentle wood,
I'd rather be there
than here in this cage
If I could get out
then I would.

and it was brilliant, set the tone, and I checked my wings so to speak to see if I am ready to fly. Sometimes we are the bars in front of us, and we are the cage that we put ourselves in. After reading this, if one is that type of person...they would want to try to fly...awesome!!!!!!!

I am ready to fly now or am ready to see you fly after reading this. This poem reminds me of a poem I wrote called "I made a stop to repair my wings"....I might dig it out now. Thank you Sally for your usual brilliance in wordsmithing and craft. I enjoyed this immensely. Love Ya! An excellent rating!

Kim