Creative Traditional:

[Mohammad Ilyas]

The beginning of spring and the shut door
roars like a lion the Narcissus odour
wet wind dances with the young green
further I want is you and nothing more

Has a command on the flowering season
and to touch it is like an offence
though nature has not given it a tongue
but openly talks of its presence

Beauty and power put pride in veins
everyone is timely with a joy or sortle
let me smell the blooming Narcissus
the thing more beautiful is more mortal.

[erikestabrook]

very nice Mohammed,

it makes good sense, and has still depth to it

[Moonchild]

This is blooming beauty all over the place!
I just love it!
Excellent write!

[Mohammad Ilyas]

Moonchild and Ericesta!
Thankyou both for the liking. Remain happy.

[PaintedDiary]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Mohammad Ilyas

The beginning of spring and the shut door
roars like a lion the Narcissus odour
wet wind dances with the young green
further I want is you and nothing more

Has a command on the flowering season
and to touch it is like an offence
though nature has not given it a tongue
but openly talks of its presence

Beauty and power put pride in veins
everyone is timely with a joy or sortle
let me smell the blooming Narcissus
the thing more beautiful is more mortal.

This is simply beautiful. One cannot read this just once. You have a unique style that captures me from beginning to end, and I am left in awe. Every line brings a power all its own. Great write!

Kimberly

[Mohammad Ilyas]

Dear Kimberly! May you be happy. You seem to me a sensitive personality. Thankyou for the nice comment.

[JolieH]

Lovely Mohammad,
This is truly a depiction of passion and beauty. I've been studying some post modern lyric and was actually thinking of using a narcissus to create a poem of split self concept. I enjoyed this very much.

[Mohammad Ilyas]

Thankyou Miss Jolie, I am happy to have your nice comment and enjoying the writing.