Nature's Anthem

shawnie · 06-28-2006, 12:03 PM

Whistle Wind
Sing me a song
Quiet as a hummingbird,
Yet strong as love

Play your rhythm
Etch it in my mind
Add in thunderous percussions
And a cosmic light show

Briefly deafen my ears
And blind my eyes
So that I may truly feel your song

Every touch of your breath
A beautiful note
Every whistle
A masterpiece

Pellets of wetness
Make their début
My body is now a canvas.

Paint me with your brilliance oh wind.
So I will always respect your power.
Caress me with your presence oh rain
So I’ll never forget your gentleness

Whistle oh wind,
Whistle me a song.

LW 3/8/06

FaShaBaby · 06-29-2006, 03:14 PM

This was nice, shawnie. I give you props for coming up with this. It was very serene.

"Pellets of wetness
Make their début
My body is now a canvas."

That stanza was excellent. You go gurl.

GetShorty · 07-09-2006, 01:26 AM

This makes me want to go sit out in a thunderstorm. That would be silly, of course, but it just shows how attractive you made nature out to be. I also liked how you described the power of it all... "Deafen me", "blind me"... Wow.

I think this was very well written.

07-11-2006, 12:39 PM

FaShababy and getshorty are right. You really brought out the beauty of nature in this piece.

PaintedDiary · 07-11-2006, 06:55 PM

Hey Shawnie,
I just wanted to comment twice. This piece is simply exquisite, and a masterpiece. I read this a few times, because it is so tranquil and serene. I feel like I am walking slowly in the Garden of Eden, taking time to talk to nature. Shawnie, this is one of the most beautiful poems, I have ever read. We are blessed that you are here.

Much Luv'...~*Painted Diary*~

shawnie · 07-12-2006, 11:51 AM

Thanks fellas and fellettes. I appreciate all the kind words and comments. I'm trying to slow down and smell the roses, the rain, all that. There is so much we take for granted. I just wanted to bring something different to you guys.

Thanks again.

MsJacquiiC · 07-12-2006, 09:35 PM

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Every touch of your breath
A beautiful note
Every whistle
A masterpiece

Hey SHAWNIE - I think I've seen this piece before

But that doesn't really stop me from commenting on the beauty of this piece - You've described a serenity that many want to know; few have sought it!

Really beautiful write SHAWNIE - you continue to surprise with your poetic flow! Thanx for sharing!

Jacquii.

TrueBlue · 07-17-2006, 07:12 PM

There aren't enough nature poems out there.

LW Barker · 07-17-2006, 07:36 PM

Very nice Shawnie, but the LW 03/08/06 makes me curious....