Creative Traditional:

[Terence]

That one night

He lies there, smiling sweetly, resplendent
in his manliness; his mysteries
dissolving, slowly, in my gaze.
His understanding and warmth
have reawakened all my
sensitivities.
Though forbidden,
I can’t help
loving
him

Her
eyes shine
with the glow
of love released.
Passions, once alive
and unrelenting, now
resurfacing in a flood
of senses overflowing the
edges of ecstasy; only to be
subdued again – but never forgotten.

[nomadicrhymer]

Brilliant Terence!! I am loving this piece...like two halves of a whole, they combine perfectly, romantically, and aesthetically.

Simply exquisite work.

Nomad

[Terence]

Hi Therese, I appreciate you words very much. I started with 'him' and 'her', then it was just a matter of putting the two together, and adding a bit of spicy intrigue of course.

Thanks, Terence

[JolieH]

Great idea, I like the hour glass form, and how they meet were the sands of time sift between them.

[Mysty]

Wonderful Terence A beautiful depiction of love.

Mysty

[Terence]

Hi Jolie, an interesting take on the shape. The Ethere form, with syllable count going from 1 through 10 on each line, lends itself to the pyramid shape. I had another reason for this shape but yours is equally appropriate. Thanks for the reply.


Thanks, Mysty, I'm pleased you liked it. Your words are appreciated.

Terence

[MsJacquiiC]

Hi TERENCE - very nice poem - As MS N says - I like the way even the words look like 2 parts of the whole... It's like an hour glass - like the ying and yang - epitomizing a fantasy of love perhaps...

My favorite lines is at the pinnacle perhaps:

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Though forbidden,
I can’t help
loving
him

Her
eyes shine
with the glow
of love released.

Beautiful sentiments make for a heartfelt tribute/ode to love, even though the last line leaves a pessimistic feeling: subdued again – but never forgotten. Perhaps such is the feeling one has whilst in the midst of one-night-stand.

At anyrate - a very nice Ethere poem.
Thanx for the sharing

Jacquii.

[Terence]

Hi Ms Jacquii,
I really appreciate your thoughts. If you scratch the surface a little, particularly all 9 lines you quote, you may find there is more to the story than just a random one-night-stand, or maybe not if I haven't expressed myself well enough.

Thanks, Terence

[MsJacquiiC]

LOL - I actually not only read the lines but I embraced them - It seems like a reverie that I am used to - only I didn't too much get to say goodbye....

Yet....

At anyrate - a very lovely poem - it's sad as your heroine seems to be the one with the tear in her eye.

Jacquii.

[Terence]

Hi Jacquii,
Coming back to this, I've been away a while, as you say, it does seem to me now as though it is the female who has all the regret. That could get me in trouble. I really appreciate your feminine viewpoint and intuitiveness.

Terence