Passion Murmurs (one of my favorite poems)

MsJacquiiC · 07-17-2006, 04:04 AM

Passion Murmurs

water in my glass; dew
supple as a longing love,
lingering shadows

clock caws like ravens,
crow ticks crucial as subtle
cravings in my loins

tapping on floors
like whisperings of secret laws
at my love-soaked sheets

music like mambos:
wind on my window, raucous
like passion murmurs

Copyright © 2005 Jacquii Cooke

PaintedDiary · 01:24 AM

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by MsJacquiiC

Passion Murmurs

clock caws like ravens,
crow ticks crucial as subtle
cravings in my loins

like whisperings of secret laws

music like mambos:
wind on my window, raucous
like passion murmurs

Ms Jacquii, Whoa!!!!! This is a masterpiece!! I read this four times! How do you do it? The juxtaposition of certain words are just brilliant! So much depth and meaning. The passionate imagery came alive in my mind, left my cerebral tingling! Then, I read it out loud a few times, the words seemed to demand that type of omnipotence. I am sure you have many masterpieces, but this is Maya Angelou style! I hope to be able to write on this level one day, Ms Jacquii, {at the top of the foodchain!} LOL!! The world is yours! Loved It! What was your inspiration for this Ms Jacquii?

Much Luv'...KIM

MsJacquiiC · 07-18-2006, 05:21 PM

Thanx KIM - This is the poem on the 1st page of my site JPS (http://PoetJC.info) Initially it was a series of haiku that I'd written - I decided to combine and make a longer piece - And what you've so graciously commented on is the result!

Of course the piece is about L-O-V-E... Well - me wanting it anyway LOL - I wanted to write a poem about the lust factor. That's it

Thanx for your fond words!

Jacquii.

PaintedDiary · 07-19-2006, 01:46 PM

Ms Jacquii, I simply love this, as I have read this beauty several times. How genious to combine Haikus! Yes, the L-O-V-E radiates from this piece. As I have stated, this is a masterpiece. Can we comment twice? This deserves it!!!!

Kim

MsJacquiiC · 07-31-2006, 07:52 AM

Well thank you very kindly Ma'am - I appreciate the love - This is one of my favorite pieces, as I was going through a really tough time in my life as far as love is concerned and just wanted to reaffirm that it does indeed still exist!

Thanx for the comment!

Jacquii.

Jeez · 04-18-2007, 05:07 AM

Well... Ms J...,

This... well this...
it stired more then
my mind...

You know what '
mean.

The Following Text Is Quoted:

tapping on floors
like whisperings of secret laws
at my love-soaked sheets

music like mambos:
wind on my window, raucous
like passion murmurs

Almost feel as if 've
been...

erikestabrook · 04-18-2007, 09:27 AM

msJ your good you know how I kno wyou describe dsomething so obscure beautifully,
you see what people normally think this is is a coma after sex,
now what you made it is coma after sex that i'd love to have lol

mangodroplet · 04-19-2007, 03:20 AM

wow...
i can't relate to it just yet....
but this poem made me feel.
feel...something that i don't know how to say.
but thanks for it.

MsJacquiiC · 04-22-2007, 07:45 PM

Thanx JEEZ, ERIK & MANGO
I appreciate your comments.
This poem is so simple, but so is love.
Thanx for taking time to see the love in this piece.

Jacquii.

Curtis Spider Lee · 04-27-2007, 08:07 PM

Wow!! Nice poem Jacquiic! Thank You for sharing this work with us!