Petals in the Wind

Sally Roberts · 05-13-2007, 05:34 PM

Where once the bloomed in early rains,
Wild flowers ranged toward the sky.
Such beauty spanned across the plains
Like reaching out to wave good-bye.

Wild flowers ranged toward the sky.
Confetti colors gently blend
Like reaching out to wave good-bye;
Painting beauty to the end.

Confetti colors gently blend,
Floating through where branches bend,
Painting beauty to the end
Are now just petals in the wind.

Floating through where branches bend,
Such beauty spanned across the plains
Are now just petals in the wind
Where once the bloomed in early rains.

Bear · 05-13-2007, 05:39 PM

beautiful poem Sally in the first and last line is that suppose to be the or they It sounds better "where they bloomed in the early rain"
hugs kisses
tom

Sally Roberts · 05-13-2007, 06:18 PM

Thanks for your comment Bear.

Yep, The line is suppose to end with rains (with the "s" ) because of the many rains that fell upon the petals before the winds carried them away across the plains.
And also so that is would rhyme better. Thanks again.

Blessings

Bear · 05-13-2007, 11:17 PM

your so very welcome Sally

erikestabrook · 05-19-2007, 03:43 PM

Sally I feel lucky to have read this,
this was perfect in structure and meaning
absolutely stunning in message and lyrics

Sally Roberts · 05-19-2007, 03:53 PM

WOW! Thanks erik:
I am truely blushing by your words. It's writers like you and comments like this that make it all worth the effort of writing poetry. Thanks erik.

Blessings

Bear · 05-19-2007, 05:09 PM

Sally I just heard a song called petals falling and thought of this poem I think it would go great with it the music is played on a harp and flute very hauntingly beautiful
hugs kisses
Bear
ps love this poem

nomadicrhymer · 05-20-2007, 02:59 AM

Sally I just adore this form of poetry...I've tried one but you have inspired me to try another...it is such a layer blending of beauty and imprints itself on the mind and heart with the repetition, expanding each time to envelope more of the meaning....absolutely love it!

Nomad

Sally Roberts · 05-20-2007, 01:28 PM

Thank You Nomad

I am happy to know that you were inspired. I love to write poetry that will bring on inspirations, emotions, or instant images within the words. I have succeeded in doing so with this one.

thanks for your comment.

Blessings