Creative Traditional:

[mangodroplet]

She only felt the pain
In ravages of time,
Across the path she'd lain
Midst all the dirt and grime.

In ravages of time
She knew not what to do,
Midst all the dirt and grime
She knew not what was true.

She knew not what to do
When taunted, tossed, and spurned,
She knew not what was true
From all that she had learned.

When taunted, tossed, and spurned
Across the path she'd lain,
From all that she had learned,
She only felt the pain.

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[erikestabrook]

this was very cool, i think the most orgaized likeable calculated poem you've done
so keep going in this direction

[mangodroplet]

Thanks Erik!
yeah...forms are cool...:]

[Curtis Spider Lee]

Intresting Ann, it seem some folks can become intraped into the same web of troubles! Many don't seem to learn anything other than pain in a diffrent place. Your poem taste: wonderfully bitter sweet. I enjoyed!

[nomadicrhymer]

Hey Miss Mango! I love the repetition and the form...so smoothly flowing...it slides like honey...couple with a flawless beat...this is a hard hitter!

Nomad

[mangodroplet]

Thank you Curtis! Bitter sweet, it is....yeah, kind of writing about myself before *shrugs*
Thanks for the read and i'm glad i gave you enjoyment!!!

Nomad-*huggles*
I LOVE the form too :]
I'm glad it hit the heart

[JONATHAN]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

When taunted, tossed, and spurned
Across the path she'd lain,
From all that she had learned,
She only felt the pain.

this is perhaps ure first poem that ive read and commenting on .. love it .. the form is perfect and the rhyming is perfect as if each line is made for each other .wot strikes me the most however is how uve so well put into words the overpowering intensity of pain.. been there . seen how it numbs out everything ...yea ! evn though theres this purpose for everything .. pain at times just denies its purpose ...love how uve portrayed that in this piece .. love it... JONATHAN

[mangodroplet]

Thank you JONATHAN!
I'm am humbled by your comment.
Wow....

*huggles*

[Benny]

Anna....what a well thought out work! Your presentation is right on and the repetition works great...a very nice work...and I believe the best I have read of your works so far...I am excited to read your next work. Very, very well done, muse. I love the subject, as everyone can relate to it...readable and poetic...all in one.

[mangodroplet]

Thanks Benny!
And wow...to think I wrote this in a 10 minute lunch period :]
hmm. When i do the least thinking, I do the most heart.
And that's what's important.
First poem poem I've written in a while...
Thanks Benny! *huggles*
I am excited that you liked this work!!! :]