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Silent Onslaught (CinqTroisDecaLa Rhyme)

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Old 09-06-2006, 05:08 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Silent Onslaught

Nighttime woe fills my most secret of sacred places; I want...
I conjur that sweet caress to feather my... Silent onslaught.
The nether regions of my very own soul delights in it:
The temptation beckoned with whispers of feigned-voice innocense.
Yet my own body succumbs to the pressures of such sweet pain
Muscles tense and the hint of a tear dares show my hidden shame,
Though smoothly the wet lets the sigh - that dare never come in - reign.
The beauty of such a terribly horrid, yet haunting taunt
Whilst Mom sleeps under covers of seven thickly huge blankets
My moan is heard. I swear I never want to be raped again.



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Old 09-17-2006, 06:36 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Yet my own body succumbs to the pressures of such sweet pain
Muscles tense and the hint of a tear dares show my hidden shame,
Though smoothly the wet lets the sigh - that dare never come in - reign.
The beauty of such a terribly horrid, yet haunting taunt
Whilst Mom sleeps under covers of seven thickly huge blankets
My moan is heard. I swear I never want to be raped again.
Ummm, it really hurts inside to read this....I don't know the personal feeling but a few women I really love and care for have told me stories like this and it is horrible; I truly don't know what to say...I mean it is an amazing poem but the topic just...*sigh* I don't know, I wanna say I loved it but it seems weird to enjoy a poem about rape; I'm sorry
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Old 09-28-2006, 03:14 PM   #3 (permalink)
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damn jac, that was a curveball from left field & i enjoyed it/ enjoyed it much. all the read i'm invisioning a totally differnt sufferage. it read somewhat a carnal romance until,

"Whilst Mom sleeps under covers of seven thickly huge blankets
My moan is heard. I swear I never want to be raped again."

that pierces deep mana. cuidado-
 

Old 09-30-2006, 12:06 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Hey KING and ARIONO - thanx very much for your nice comments - This poem is quite the culmination of my last 6 years of living...

I've read stories from Women who've been raped and the guilt they have from actually enjoying the sensations.... But I'm sure most know that rape is about control! I just wanted to write about that in a way that makes sense to me. As I am a very sexual being - I just can't really understand how anyone would want to take that which is most dearest to me and mines: control, freedom, liberty....

Glad you guys liked the write. The rhyme scheme is actually one of my favorites!

Thanx again.

Jacquii.



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My poetry is like a piece of General Tso's chicken tossed in ghetto soul.” ---
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Old 09-30-2006, 12:37 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I read this over and over. Such a beautifully written poignant testimony. I am left however, speechless. I am sorry that you experienced this. Yes, I also have read stories about the unspoken pleasure of this horrid act. The culmination of the selection of words, rhyming style, and imagery is something to behold, as far as your craft. The subject matter is a very difficult concept to read about, therefore, one can only imagine how you felt scribing this piece. To share such memories tainted with pain is amazing. I am having a moment reading this.......

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Old 10-02-2006, 10:57 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Thanx very much you guys for your comments for this piece - Yep it was a difficult write - honest, but certainly difficult - I just reread it and the hint of a tear I dare not let escape...... Anyway - thanx very much for all your nice comments

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My poetry is like a piece of General Tso's chicken tossed in ghetto soul.” ---
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