Soliloquy

Kit Carson · 10-15-2007, 08:11 PM

Solitarily I once did speak

Outside the realm of reality

Life lived a loner’s way, deep

Inside myself the play

Lovers came and went

On just a day

Quietly

Until

You

~

Mike Carson

10-10-2007

JolieH · 10-16-2007, 06:13 PM

"To be or not to be: that is the question."
a bit of inspiration from one of the greatest siloliquys.

RhymeZone: Shakespeare > Tragedies > Hamlet > Act III, scene I

This is lovely Kit, says much regarding your inner thoughts, and to end in "you", as you speak to yourself I presume.

Kit Carson · 10-16-2007, 07:18 PM

Thanks Jolie, I actually posted a picture of that on my web site yesterday! Great minds. Scott put the word in my head though when he included it in our three-way collaboration "The Choice." I was actually using it somewhat as metphor of my previous life before I met my wife. So imagine lonely solitude "speaking" (living) alone until...

Mysty · 10-16-2007, 08:30 PM

BEAUTIFUL write Kit!! I really like how you did this and looking at it's shape is like looking at half a heart. Ingenious !!

Mysty

JolieH · 10-16-2007, 08:40 PM

Ahh Kit, you are such a sweet husband.

Although, in this situation you're forced to adhere to code, hence "quietly" alone, until wife and kids... Not much quiet time left, LOL the nature of this poem admits with certain ambiguity your appreciation for companionship and love.

Kit Carson · 10-16-2007, 09:47 PM

Really set out to simply write an acrostic for a challenge and just couldn't resist the nonet when I saw I had going. The nonet, however, does limit you to 45 syllables total and can cause quite a struggle as you are winding down. The 4 syllable line caused much agony and was compounded by the acrostic form. Is easy to write yourself into a corner, I wanted more words...Thanks for your kind words Mysty but I think the half heart shape would be inhierent in the nonet form, I can't claim it. However, you can call me ingenious all day long and I wont stop you, lol. Thank you both for reading and for your wonderful comments. I must pick a day soon and come here to do nothing but read and comment. I am now connected to over three hundred people on my personal websites and it gets harder and harder.

PaintedDiary · 10-17-2007, 05:38 PM

Dear Kit,

This is so beautiful...and "Soliloquy"is one of my favorite words! I love the crispness, and brevity of this with as much voice as a loud speaker. You outdid yourself with this one. I love it, and yet it is just as soft as downy. Bravo dear poet.

Kim

Terence · 10-19-2007, 10:59 PM

Lovely poem, Kit, and I didn't miss your meaning as I also felt that way at one time. Forms can be hard to follow but you have done an excellent job of following both of them.

Beth Castillo · 10-21-2007, 01:21 PM

I'm a huge fan of brevity in poetry, and I understand the struggle to keep it that way.

... I saw it as "I was lonely until you came into my life" sort of theme. Very well done.

Kit Carson · 03-06-2008, 10:02 PM

I fell behind in my thanking, three
great reviews went by unanswered
I have no clue what I was
thinking but clearly
I should pay a bit
more attention
to what is
added
here