Creative Traditional:

[JolieH]

Still too High

Green leaves with hint of yellow decorated the walk.
A key imbedded in my soul, the lock undone.
On tip toes reach, the door so high.
still too high. Crickets chirp in the darkness.
I see him peer down, smile, close the door.

I bow down, pick up a small pebble.
feeling affection to the stone
worn smooth by the stormy sea..
I rub it gently across my cheek,
show it to the moon.

I step closer to the edge, look over,
Breath of wind cools my spirit
hold out my arms like a bird,
lean foreword, let go, fly in circles,
a man stands below a white horse at side,
showing a music box to the sun.

[PaintedDiary]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by JolieH

Still too High

Green leaves with hint of yellow decorated the walk.
A key imbedded in my soul, the lock undone.
On tip toes reach, the door so high.
still too high. Crickets chirp in the darkness.
I see him peer down, smile, close the door.

I bow down, pick up a small pebble.
feeling affection to the stone
worn smooth by the stormy sea..
I rub it gently across my cheek,
show it to the moon.

I step closer to the edge, look over,
Breath of wind cools my spirit
hold out my arms like a bird,
lean foreword, let go, fly in circles,
a man stands below a white horse at side,
showing a music box to the sun.

Dear Jolie,

I love this piece. Itis beautiful, breezy, and carefree. Full of tranquil moments and rich images. My mind spinned many images that would make paintings....it feels, ethereal...and puts a smile on my face. Loved it!

Kim

[JolieH]

Thanks Kim,
I want to do some work on this poem. I think It just needs revision to be really good. Thanks for taking time to comment on it.

[Kit Carson]

It's quite a vision as it is. I was playing the video in my head and it plays well.

[Bear]

beautiful Jolie I get a peaceful and tranquil feeling reading this poem fantastic penning
hugs kisses
bear