Creative Traditional:

[Applejous]

Tanka is good. You love tha Tanka.
This one has no name.


When at last I stop
I hear her,
Tickling that guitar.
I have to wet my lips for a smile.
‘Cause it’s been a while.

Copyright © 2006 - Applejous, Perth WA

J

[Matto]

First thing I though of when I saw the title was Derka Derka Derka... Too much team america for me

I love this one, always have. Makes me want to see her, to hear her...

[Applejous]

heheh it does sound like that team america thing lol

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Makes me want to see her, to hear her...

yeah well hopefully, when you close your eyes, you can (hehe lame, but you know )

J

ps - that dancing thing is killing me!.....no, really, i fear it may

[Matto]

No need to worry, Ill do something magical and it will attack me instead of you

[PaintedDiary]

Such sweet imagery in such a small space. I LOVE IT!!! So Tanka!!!!!!:declare:

Much Luv'...~*Painted Diary*~

[MsJacquiiC]

Ah yes - The tanka - 2nd or 3rd cousin to the haiku...

Very nice APPLEJOUS - Descriptive lust-love resides in this poem... Infatuation perhaps? At anyrate thanx for sharing it - beautiful piece!

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When at last I stop
I hear her,
Tickling that guitar.
I have to wet my lips for a smile.
‘Cause it’s been a while.

ALSO welcome to the JPiC Community - If you haven't done so already - Feel free to introduce yourself via the Member Introductions forum.

Jacquii.

[FaShaBaby]

I thought this was such a cool little piece of Tanka. The tone was very playful and fun.

"I have to wet my lips for a smile."

I like that line there.

[Ariono-jovan Labu]

applejoes- enjoyed this here immensly artist. a nice end- rhyme chime yeah.