Creative Traditional:

[Kit Carson]

I remember fields of green
where once I lay
with a love unseen
an unknown game to play

Where once I lay
we once did ramble
an unknown game to play
life was the gamble

We once did ramble
far and wide
life was the gamble
up the mountain side

Far and wide
with a love unseen
up the mountain side
I remember fields of green

[Jer4clarity]

Kit,

I like the way you tied all your lines together. This adds body to your context and to the poem. Great write!

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The Following Text Is Quoted:

Far and wide
with a love unseen
time only will abide
I remember fields of green

Jerry

[Kit Carson]

Thank you very much my friend. I spent many many days roaming those fields near where I grew up, with a variety of friends. Sadly they are housing complexes mostly now.

[Sally Roberts]

Goodness Kit:

I loved your pantoum poem. This type of poem is a challenge for sure, and you pulled it off perfectly. The meter and rhyme was totally grand. and the imagery was splendid!

I loved it Thanks for sharing
Blessings
Sally

[Kit Carson]

But sadly it wasn't a pantoum. I had to pull "Only time will abide" in favor of "Up the montain side". It was a coin toss. I thought there was one line that didn't repeat when I first read the rules for form, but all lines repeat! Fixed it! Thanks for your comments my friends, don't hate me for the edit!