Emotional Romantic:

[MsJacquiiC]

Spontaneous Collaboration by mojolips & MsJacquiiC

The Poem

Put Upon Our Love
poem in 2 parts...

Part 1.
silence cannot hold back
the season of truth
when spring comes and love
is spoken true and wise.

yet the reason still
sings in your eyes
like a fire burning,
the torch like your gaze.

simply you somehow amaze
silver torches in the dark
and rose petals adorned,
pearls lingering on your neck.

reflect the light
still in you for me
(the tempo of reason)
dripping off my tounge.

Part 2.
"Fall Goliath, for my heart aches
to see you from afar."

let not the distance
shake our love.

"Yet mine eyes shine,
glowing with temptation."

for the heavens not known by my gods
i still call upon the souls to liberate.
yes! emancipate from demons' wrath
heart, for I forsake love naught.

never has this known such cause for conflict
ste this need free

"Freedom softly moans my Goliath;
such a conflict never needed."

i give no others right but to taste
the lips of the dew in the morn of my dreams
and temptation so wet, longing
never knoweth such a need; my love.

no other can match the strain put upon my love
"No other can match the strain put upon our love."

very good i like

[MsJacquiiC]

I like it too - great collaboration and so spontaneous - I love spontaneous poetry - Great creating with you! Thanx for the opportunity.

Jacquii.

[JolieH]

This is wonderful. You make a great team.

[PaintedDiary]

Oooohh I love this spontaneous collab! Lovin' the Old English feel adorned with elegance.

reflect the light
still in you for me
(the tempo of reason)
dripping off my tounge.

i give no others right but to taste
the lips of the dew in the morn of my dreams
and temptation so wet, longing
never knoweth such a need; my love.

no other can match the strain put upon my love
"No other can match the strain put upon our love."

One cannot read this once and feel satisfied. I love when poems leave a lingering craving to read and absorb more...and this does from alpha to omega...lovely! Congrats you two...and sooo inspiring!

PD

[MsJacquiiC]

Thanx very much for your wonderful comment KIM and you too JOLIE - I'm glad you liked this very spontaneous write - I sort of wanted it to read as if written by one Poet and I think we accomplished that quite nicely... Unfortunately MOJOLIPS is no longer part of the JPiC Community - Seems we poeted well together - but bumped heads otherwise and he asked to be removed from the Memberlist... Oh well...

At anyrate - thanx YAWL for the kind words and support!

Jacquii.

[JolieH]

Geez,
I can't imagin anyone bumping heads with you Ms. jacquii. Oh well, if he's not kind to you, I'm glad he's gone.

[Mysty]

WOW ..... this is really beautiful. Definitely a keeper and I will be back to re read a few times.
You two do work magic together Ms Jacqui and Mojolips

[Sally Roberts]

MsJacquii:

WOW! WOW! This is a total masterpiece! I think spontaneous writing is great! The collabration was right on.

It poem speaks volumes and the imagery was flawless. It's too bad your collabrator wasn't able to keep from butting heads with you.

All in all though the poem was great.

Blessings

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by JolieH

Geez,
I can't imagin anyone bumping heads with you Ms. jacquii. Oh well, if he's not kind to you, I'm glad he's gone.

Oh - He was kind - he just didn't like that I told him to be aware of what he posts when he's three sheets to the wind and posting "poems" of only 2 words...

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Mysty

WOW ..... this is really beautiful. Definitely a keeper and I will be back to re read a few times.
You two do work magic together Ms Jacqui and Mojolips

Thanx MS MYSTY - I surely do appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I thought the piece was magic as well and it was such a thrill to work with him, he actually invited me to Live Chat to collab together - And the lines flowed so naturally...

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Sally Roberts

MsJacquii:

WOW! WOW! This is a total masterpiece! I think spontaneous writing is great! The collabration was right on.

It poem speaks volumes and the imagery was flawless. It's too bad your collabrator wasn't able to keep from butting heads with you.

All in all though the poem was great.

Blessings

Hey MS SALLY! Thanx for the read and nice comment - I'm happy you enjoyed the poem - MOJOLIPS had some issue with a PM I sent him and asked to be removed from the JPiC Member list - so I of course didn't hesitate to oblige - It's a shame really that he'll be missing out on THE best Forum for Poets, Writers & Artistes on the entire internet...

Anyway - Thanx YAWL for the very nice comments... I'm sure if MOJOLIPS happened by to read them - he'd appreciate them as well

Jacquii.