White Rose

Sartor · 03-10-2007, 01:56 PM

WHITE ROSE
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The setting Sun-God kissed a bud
that lay among the thorn.
Upon that loving, gentle kiss
a snow white rose was born.
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He promised when he left her there,
he would return again.
Once more sweet love they two would share
and gone would be the pain.
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She waits in darkness of the night,
bowed low in grief her head.
He’s gone away, he’s taken flight,
she wishes she were dead.
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The cold moon in the purple sky
stared down upon her plight,
as quietly she starts to cry
cold tear drops in the night.
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The perfect whiteness of her skin
now marred by dew drop tears,
never to see her love again
but live within her fears.
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But lo, upon the eastern rim
a red smudge softly glows.
Her heart still filled with love for him,
the heart of the white rose.
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With dew drop tears on petals white
she waits to greet her Lord.
His rosy glow soon kills the night,
his rays a fire sword.
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His red-gold beams search out the rose,
demands to be inside.
She blushes, bows and softly glows,
then holds her petals wide.
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His sunbeams touch her very soul
his love had made her bloom.
She softly pays the lover’s toll,
allows him to consume.
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His blinding brilliance floods the plain
and suddenly she knows,
each day he will come back again
to love the pure white rose.
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Sartor

nomadicrhymer · 03-10-2007, 04:14 PM

This is an amazing lesson in love, patience, submission and triumph..a masterpiece!

Nomad

Sartor · 03-10-2007, 05:15 PM

Nomad.........a masterpiece? I doubt that very much. Thanks for the very kind words. I appreciate them

TrueBlue · 03-11-2007, 10:43 PM

Nice simplicity!

Intricate soul · 03-12-2007, 06:17 AM

Very nice, I love the simplicity. Purity, a white rose, innocence at its best.

You should try a complimenting piece, perhaps a dew drop or a humming bird's perspective... think about it. Muy Bien!!

Sartor · 03-12-2007, 01:35 PM

True Blue.......thanks for the note.

Hola, Intricate Soul.......Welcome to the forum. Thanks for the compliment.

Curtis Spider Lee · 03-17-2007, 01:59 AM

Not to judge you but I feel you in the work here.
Simply Beautyful Mr.Sartor.

Sartor · 03-17-2007, 01:38 PM

CSL....No judgment is necessary. As with most poets, a part of me lies within each poem I write. Welcome to our forum. I look forward to seeing your work posted here. Thank you for the remarks.

zaac · 03-17-2007, 03:59 PM

hey stranger...never see you until you drop a poem. nice to see you. and as always, you still do good work. come around more.

zaac

Bear · 03-18-2007, 05:31 PM

Zaac

magnificent loving write, this is written with true love in your heart and filled with emotions
handshakes
tom