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[Astral Wizard]

Almost
Written by:
Jessy Andrews
1-5-2002

When I laid in your arms last night.
I don't know how I felt.
When I laid in your arms last night.
I felt almost….almost human.

Was it good for you?
Just another piece of meat.
When it’s over I'll once again take my seat.
Should have kept my wits about me.

Driven away and broken apart.
Feeling a negative energy when your hand’s on my flesh.
Negative energy when I'm on my stomach, under your body.
Are trying to drain me of my remaining sanity.

Remaining sanity…. Yeah, I believe in it.
Should have kept up my wit.
But, I didn't you had to tear at me one more time.
I'll make note of this. I won't repeat this crime.

It’s over now. You're again dust to the wind.
The time of your dying will be no end.
For thanks to me. You'll carry a curse of eternal suffering.
How well does that fit your vision?

The night now. No longer young.
I won't inflict upon you the abuse of my tongue.
I should though, but nothing it would accomplish.
Proof has shown me what you start you cannot finish.

Do I sound angry?
Does this give off an edge?
A mistake it was to again recite love’s pledge.
I do not regret what I have done.

A kiss so cold.
There’s nothing in this I want to hold.
I let go like it was never there.
My thoughts are no longer there to share.

Suffocation to my personal air.
Yes, I know I have made statements about suffocation.
But, I've had enough.
I'm now turning away, never to look back.

Thank you for making me almost….almost human.

[erikestabrook]

very cool Jessy this had drama and emotion that had unique phrases
most people get emotion just not structure or importance of the next rhyme
great start Jessy

[nomadicrhymer]

I love the passion and the pent-up rage (deep under the surface) in this piece. It seems to emanate regret as well. I'm curious to know whether this was a couple or a quick meeting of two people because it feels as though there is feeling there...even though it almost appears as if it's a chance "sexual encounter" to start out. Hmmm...of course I'll have to read it again.

Very well done, Astral!

Nomad