Miscellaneous:

[erikestabrook]

This life is sink or swim,

when you finally give up,

when your hunted down for your feathered quills,

and your wandering thoughts are your only thrills,



when someone picks you up

like a fish by the gills,

you'd never ever surrendered so quick,

your caught on a pole,

with nowwhere to go,



your hooked on a concept,

stretched to oblivion,

when will you accept that once you go bad sometimes

you can't go back,



I can see you, feel you,

but your nowwhere near me,

I'm awake with just my thoughts.





by Erik Estabrook

[Curtis Spider Lee]

Wooo...nice and hunting your thoughts within thoughts here Erik!
I did enjoy this write very much....however I had a question.

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Originally Posted by erikestabrook

When will you accept that once you go bad sometimes

you can't go back,

This is your 12th line, was it meant to be in the form of a question?
This line rocks and I felt I needed to know more about it's meaning.

[erikestabrook]

well Curtis it was meant as statement, it goes with the theme off a fish on a hook,
which represents the tie we have with our dreams and the despair that can be poetry,
most of the poem has to do with someone owning your dreams,
the verse you like has to do with being unrepentant,
and it ties in with the fish as in bad fish, fish have no lifeline like people do to God,
so in essence its stating the hopelessness of the situation,
and how someone really has you caught when they take your poetry

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by erikestabrook

most of the poem has to do with someone owning your dreams

I interpreted as much and for this reason your poem scares me - It's like the writing of a stalker - And it's addressed to the victim.

It's definitely not "Emotional/Romantic" so I'm moving it to Miscellaneous

Interesting concept if "God" is the author, imagine God owning dreams, owning hopes, owning fears, owning all the poetry that has manifested itself from and is a direct reflection of those dreams, hopes & fears....

God-fearing anyone?

Anyway - makes for an interesting read.

Jacquii.

[Curtis Spider Lee]

I agree with Miss. Jacquii also Erik.
Thanks for the break down in your work. I've found it very informative and nothing short of pure
genius to say so much with so little words!
Man that is awesome!

[erikestabrook]

thanks msJ and Curtis, I'm glad I got to explain that one, I don't always get to explain or have an explanation

[JONATHAN]

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your hooked on a concept,

stretched to oblivion,

awsum ... this ones good .. its obsessive , compulsive and kinda wack in the head .. but who amongst us are not .. its real so real it has the capacity to scare .. like lookin into the ugly mirror .

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by JONATHAN

awsum ... this ones good .. its obsessive , compulsive and kinda wack in the head .. but who amongst us are not .. its real so real it has the capacity to scare .. like lookin into the ugly mirror .

Lol @ the wacked in the head AND the but who amongst us are not...
Hmmmm. Me!?

[stardust]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by erikestabrook

This life is sink or swim,

when you finally give up,

when your hunted down for your feathered quills,

and your wandering thoughts are your only thrills,



when someone picks you up

like a fish by the gills,

you'd never ever surrendered so quick,

your caught on a pole,

with nowwhere to go,



your hooked on a concept,

stretched to oblivion,

when will you accept that once you go bad sometimes

you can't go back,



I can see you, feel you,

but your nowwhere near me,

I'm awake with just my thoughts.





by Erik Estabrook

Hi Erik,

Your poem leave me in awe, little words, wise thoughts.
Your explanation is very interesting. I was reading the comments about your poem.
You execute and lay your thoughts with a good flow for the readers.
Thank you, Erik for sharing your thoughts provoking work of art with us!!
Bravo poet!!
All the Best, and God Bless you,
Starry.

[nomadicrhymer]

I like this! It almost seems to me that it's about someone you know who has influence on you, or a former self, but you are happy that they are not longer able to be a part of your world. I haven't read anything you said about it because I didn't want it to color my perceptions... so I may be way off! lol!

Nice job
Nomad