Miscellaneous:

[MsJacquiiC]

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Originally Posted by PaintedDiary

It seems sometimes when I don't put allot of effort into the poem from time to time or have only a vague idea of what I am writing about, just get hit by my muse, or have no idea what I am doing that something different appears...

Ah! I know this feeling very well... But really - are you saying you didn't meticulously go over each word before posting this piece? It's put together really well actually - just love the way the words flow - so I gave it another read

And I found another few lines I wanted to quote - just because of their pure brilliance... Really!

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Long burning ash of her cigarette
Falls unforgiving in his drink
He didn’t care
All he wanted was to see her dance

These lines definitely evoke a carefree type of essence, one can almost see the joie d' vivre of the dancer as she smiles coyly, the cigarette ash has dropped... Brilliant MS KIM! --- Though I think you may mean "unforgivingly" --- But now that I think about it - both words work...

Thanx again for the share

Jacquii.

[PaintedDiary]

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Originally Posted by Sally Roberts

WOW!!!!! How did I ever miss this one.

Ohhh Kim this is so beautiful, so...I am at a loss for words here. a masterpiece!!!

The title itself " Black Swan" was a complete eye catcher. And the poem was definitely flawless!! Every line was entirely individual yet flowed together in complete harmony. WOW !!!

Because I had missed reading this lovely poem I had re-read it again and again. I really loved it!!

Thanks for sharing!!

Dear Sally,

I am soooo pleased you liked this, and thank you for breathing life into it again. I am humbled by the review and it definitely made me misty...I may get out of my writers block after all. Thank you sssooooo much for taking precious time to read and to comment. When the painting is done..you will be among the first to view. love ya and many Blessings Sally.

Kim

[PaintedDiary]

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Originally Posted by Intricate soul

this one is lovely, I'm even amazed that i simulate the dancing, thinking of how she was in a trance, allowing the music to move her in me ("intricate patern")
did i say this is beautiful?

My Dear Intricate,

Ha! Yes you did say it was beautiful, and so was your words. I thank you sooo much for taking precious time to read and to comment. Yes, your "intricate pattern" is etched all over this poem my dear...lol....loved that! Thanks again Intricate as I am in awe and humbled as well. I am thinking of doing a painting or sculpture of this piece..I will keep you informed! Love ya and many Blessings to you...

Kim

[PaintedDiary]

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Originally Posted by MsJacquiiC

Ah! I know this feeling very well... But really - are you saying you didn't meticulously go over each word before posting this piece? It's put together really well actually - just love the way the words flow - so I gave it another read

And I found another few lines I wanted to quote - just because of their pure brilliance... Really!



These lines definitely evoke a carefree type of essence, one can almost see the joie d' vivre of the dancer as she smiles coyly, the cigarette ash has dropped... Brilliant MS KIM! --- Though I think you may mean "unforgivingly" --- But now that I think about it - both words work...

Thanx again for the share

Jacquii.

Dear Ms Jacquii,

Thanks girl for taking precious time AGAIN to read and to comment! I am so overwhelmed by it and I thought, YES that you would appreciate and see the poetry in those lines indeed. You are right! I did change the word, and is what I meant! I also will let you know when I am done the painting or sculpture for this piece...am think half Black Swan, and half dancer...woohoo! Love ya and many blessings....

Kim

[Curtis Spider Lee]

Hello Pained One! I'm back and I have throughly enjoyed your work! Well Painted as usual! Thank You for sharing!

[butchiesmom]

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Originally Posted by PaintedDiary

Black Swan

Lights showcase skin of ebony velvet
Parallels a panther
Long burning ash of her cigarette
Falls unforgivingly in his drink
He didn’t care
All he wanted was to see her dance

Mustard colored brocade
Pours over a chocolate hourglass
Marimba beats burn her feet

Arched torso slowly lunges forward and back
Fingertips tickling the sky
Curve with her every move

With eyes closed, she sees the music
Smells African violets
Creates sunsets as she sways

Feet lyrically dance an intricate pattern
Indigenous to her homeland
Graceful as a black swan
Elegant as a mocha butterfly

Her regal essence would stop a dove
In mid flight and find peace
In the palm of her hands
Hypnotized by her native dance

You had me from Hello! Ok, so that wasn't in there but, trust me, it seemed like it, lol. Wow! Now, my idea of dancing would have you laughing hysterically, on the floor, so I had to use a different image to visualize this.

I've seen shows with women dancing, love the way dancers move their bodies so lithely and can honestly say I'm jealous! Anyway, I used those shows as a reference point and OMG what an image!

It was just like watching those women dance, Kim! I could see her body arching, stretching up, her fingers reaching in the air for an unseen object so far out of her reach. '...Tickling the sky...' my God!, I could almost do it with her! Jacquii's right about the detail with her cigarette ash dropping into his drink, such a great detail!

Arched torso slowly lunges forward and back
Fingertips tickling the sky
Curve with her every move

I'd read this before and can't remember if I commented on it yet. But remember being sooo tired when I read it so I probably didn't. I hope I didn't because there's no way I could've appreciated the images you invoke here.

You might think I write well, Sis, but I bow down to one of the masters on this site!

lubya Sis!
Gail

[PaintedDiary]

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Originally Posted by Curtis Spider Lee

Hello Pained One! I'm back and I have throughly enjoyed your work! Well Painted as usual! Thank You for sharing!

Hey lil brother!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you for stopping by to read and to comment! I miss you terribly...we have to catch up...and I am ready to indulge in your new works! Love ya! Don't stay away soooo long!

Kim

[PaintedDiary]

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Originally Posted by butchiesmom

You had me from Hello! Ok, so that wasn't in there but, trust me, it seemed like it, lol. Wow! Now, my idea of dancing would have you laughing hysterically, on the floor, so I had to use a different image to visualize this.

I've seen shows with women dancing, love the way dancers move their bodies so lithely and can honestly say I'm jealous! Anyway, I used those shows as a reference point and OMG what an image!

It was just like watching those women dance, Kim! I could see her body arching, stretching up, her fingers reaching in the air for an unseen object so far out of her reach. '...Tickling the sky...' my God!, I could almost do it with her! Jacquii's right about the detail with her cigarette ash dropping into his drink, such a great detail!

Arched torso slowly lunges forward and back
Fingertips tickling the sky
Curve with her every move

I'd read this before and can't remember if I commented on it yet. But remember being sooo tired when I read it so I probably didn't. I hope I didn't because there's no way I could've appreciated the images you invoke here.

You might think I write well, Sis, but I bow down to one of the masters on this site!

lubya Sis!
Gail

Dear Gail,

Thank you so much for taking precious time to read and to comment. LOLOL you are so crazy! However, I am in awe of your review and I had hoped to achieve the illusion of my readers actually "visualizing" the movement and or moving with her, as well as the sharp detail of the cig . It is sooo great to see you here again..we have so much work to do! Whenever you get to commenting is fine with me...am in no hurry sis. I appreciate you taking precious time to view. Lubya too!!!!!

Kim