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[PaintedDiary]

Black Swan

She only wears Tiger’s Eye
His music highlight’s her dimples
From last night’s smile

Lights showcase skin of ebony velvet
Parallels a panther
Long burning ash of her cigarette
Falls unforgivingly in his drink
He didn’t care
All he wanted was to see her dance

Mustard colored brocade
Pours over a chocolate hourglass
Marimba beats burn her feet

Arched torso slowly lunges forward and back
Fingertips tickling the sky
Curve with her every move

With eyes closed, she sees the music
Smells African violets
Creates sunsets as she sways

Feet lyrically dance an intricate pattern
Indigenous to her homeland
Graceful as a black swan
Elegant as a mocha butterfly

Her regal essence would stop a dove
In mid flight and find peace
In the palm of her hands
Hypnotized by her native dance

[MsJacquiiC]

I like this poem very much MS KIM - you do have a great knack for telling a good story - but what makes this poem so special is the layering of beautiful words right in the midst of a wonderful backstory... The image "Black Swan" for me evokes some sort of Egyptian Princess perhaps - especially in the last stanza where you actually use the word "regal"

My favorite stanzas are actually the very last 2:

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Feet lyrically dance an intricate pattern
Indigenous to her homeland
Graceful as a black swan
Elegant as a mocha butterfly

Her regal essence would stop a dove
In mid flight and find peace
In the palm of her hands
Hypnotized by her native dance

The "mocha" aspect of the butterfly makes me think of Monarch and is followed up beautifully with the use of "regal"

A very nice piece of writing MS KIM - I hope this one gets published!
Thanx for the sharing

Jacquii.

[Mysty]

WOW Kim....... Sheer beauty in ebony form. Such grace and style. I love this one!!!
how do I put it in my favs?

Mysty

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Mysty

how do I put it in my favs?

Just click the Thread Tools link and select Add Thread To Favorites
edit: OR you can simply click the Add Post To Favorites link in the left-top corner of each post...

Jacquii.

[erikestabrook]

just breath-taking and lovely

[lasher]

Hey now PD,

Yeah, this is sweet..... Visual.....
I like mucho...
Bully, PD, bully!!

[JolieH]

Kim,
Your pieces are always such a surprise. This poem is mesmerizing. The surreal images extend beyond reality into a hypnotic realm. The arched neck of a black swan is gentle and fragile juxtaposed with the leopard dangerous, cunning, and provocative. The hints of African culture revealed through strong symbols, music, and dance motion add texture to this beautiful piece.

This is one of my favorite stanzas:

Arched torso slowly lunges forward and back
Fingertips tickling the sky
Curve with her every move

[Terence]

You have created very vivd images with your words. As well as giving us a very detailed picture that we can easily relate to, you take us further into the essence of the dancer with

"With eyes closed, she sees the music
Smells African violets
Creates sunsets as she sways"

That is beautiful.

Terence

[nomadicrhymer]

Wow...my favorite lines are the last:

Her regal essence would stop a dove
In mid flight and find peace
In the palm of her hands
Hypnotized by her native dance

They are the heart of the poem and encompass everything that went before, as well as jump start the fertile imagination for what comes after.

Beautifully painted against mixed cultural backgrounds which gave birth to the Marimba as well as the African Violet, but doesn't give away where the "native" actually is....I like that!

Nomad

[zaac]

i get chills when i read stuff you do like this. this was exquisite. i especially like the total disregard for punctuation. in this case, i think it would have done the piece a great dis-service.

I wish I knew what that felt like...lol

nuda