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Old 03-15-2011, 02:33 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Outside an inner circle of close friends
lies an individual, the in-crowd boxed in and labeled an outcast
Whose unable to break the shell of preconception
For they possess a different and difficult disposition
then that of the social elite
Putting the outcast in a position
where self-deception is more favorable than the torturous truth,
that gets them harass
Can't drink optimism from a half full glass.
When you are absorbing all your tormentors cruelty.
So with The social reject not having prestige, charisma, or beauty
They continue to be single out
creating in their mind doubt
In themselves as a person and what they can offer to someone else
This discontent is what they wrestle with daily
and also what they nestle with nightly
In the end, they accept rejection
A hurtful realization that the only thing they
and others will accept is that this outcast will always be an outcast
 

Old 03-22-2011, 07:50 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Default Re: Blank (Inspired by rejection)
Wow - nice piece - there's a lot of grammatical errors in it though: whose should be who's, harass should be harrassed, single should be singled, etc... But those are more of a nuisance, they don't negatively impact the poem, but should be correct just the same.

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In the end, they accept rejection
A hurtful realization that the only thing they
and others will accept is that this outcast will always be an outcast
I like the last 3 lines. As a bit of a loner and social outcast - this made me think. But I don't consider myself the type of person who "accepts rejection", but rather the type of person who has embraced reality as to not be weighed down and crushed by the disappointment that being a loner often causes with people who are not comfortable being in only their own presense... ((if that makes sense...)) But yeah - this was a bit personalized for me, as it seems something I've experienced .

What rejection (if I might ask) inspired this write?

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