Miscellaneous:

[Flookyyy]

Exquisitness at its best sits on the arm of the chair
Her face can be seen from the pavement through the glass
Her innocent features enlightened by the streetlamp.
The lights are down and her face is bare,
Tranquil radiance.
The latch goes, footsteps in the hallway.
"I waited up for you baby, I missed you."
He takes off his coat and hangs it from the hook on the wall.
He takes one last guilty look and sits,
"This is going to hurt."

[Mysty]

Damnit Flookyyy... you had me hooked and to end it there?? Only thing I would suggest is:

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He takes off his coat and hangs it in the from the wall.

He takes off his coat and hangs it from the hook on the wall.

my change is the italics. Anyways lol I quite enjoyed this but it is TOO short!!

Mysty

[Flookyyy]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I have now made the appropriate changes.
Although "short and sweet" is my preferred style of writing, I am currently working on some longer pieces which will be on here shortly!


Flook x

[butchiesmom]

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Originally Posted by Flookyyy

Her innocent features enlightened by the streetlamp.
The lights are down and her face is bare,
Tranquil radiance.

I like your writing. You can depict so much with just a few words! I could see her sitting by the window in the darkened room, her face illuminated by street lights. The door opens, he walks in and pain begins.

Fantastic!

hugs,
Gail