Miscellaneous:

[Jeez]

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[MsJacquiiC]

Wow JEEZ - this poem started off as a total unknown to me - I didn't know where you were going with this one... Slowly a tear threatened to slip down my cheek - Your words as catalyst for my own silent cry - Yep I know breakfast o-so well....

The Following Text Is Quoted:

As she spoke, the
words fell out of
my mouth, 'm hungry
as well.

That stanzas is where my back kinda straightened and stood at a rigorous attention... You words are playing no joke dude! I want to know how on earth anyone can make such a sensual poem... "What came 1st the yoke, the egg, the chicken, the farmer, the caregiver to the chicken...?"

Really nice write - I enjoyed this one thorougly - Thanx for the share

Jacquii.

[Altree94]

LOL! You got me with this one!
At first I thought I was reading about vampires!
This is the kind of poem you have to read at least twice because you can't really grasp it until you get to the end and only then can you see how fitting the begining really is!
Good job, I really enjoyed this!

[Jeez]

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[PaintedDiary]

Dear Jeez,

This was some "storem!" My made up word for a "poem" that reads like a "story". I mean you had me goin', really goin'. Yes, I read this several times. Each time, a slightly different feel, an ever so slightly different hint. I still did not get the "Wow Factor", until the end, then "WOW!!! I sure was fooled in this one!! How soft, and sensual, then slowly turning the fantasy to reality is quite clever, and skillful. I felt like I was there. This was a brilliant display of the art form called "Writing" Jeez. I really enjoy reading your work, and look forward to reading more!

Lastly, Jeez, I was thinking, in the following stanza:

Answering she said
that she's hear for
me, what's the easiest
for you she continued.

that the word "hear", should be "here". Bravo Poet. Take Care.

Kimberly

[Jeez]

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