Miscellaneous:

[Flookyyy]

I recieved all your letters
They're still in my drawer next to wrappers and paperclips.
Teenage heartache is simply a skim of the blade.
Your hair's a mess, perfect emblem of distress.
You think this is bad;
Wait untill you see what daddy's been hiding,
And what mummy's going to do.

[Mysty]

Hiya Flookyyy,

quick rule of thumb.... i before e except after c. so received. Now all I can say is .... again too damned short. I find I am really enjoying your work but it is too short. You my dear.. are a tease hm?


Mysty

[butchiesmom]

I'm glad Mysty caught the i before e thing, lol. Also, Mommy and Daddy should be capitalized, I think since they're proper nouns. (Maybe I'm wrong, wouldn't be the first or the last time, lol)

Anyway, Mysty's right, you are a tease, lol. This is incredibly short. The one thing I was wondering about was this line: Teenage heartache is simply a skim of the blade. Could you clarify what you were referring to? Seeing that you're eighteen and that so many young people use razor blades for something other than shaving, I'm really hoping it's not what I think it is.

This is a good poem, Flookyyy!

hugs,
Gail

[Flookyyy]

Thank you both for reading, and for your corrections and advice .

butchiesmom, I have sent you a private message addressing your concern.

As you may have realised by now, my poetry is short and abstract, and often confusing if the reader does not know the story behind it. The reason my poetry is short is because I love how you can portray such a strong feeling and make such a strong point, just within a few abstract lines.

Although this is my preferred way of writing, I will take your advice into consideration and experiment.

Thank you again .