Miscellaneous:

[rosesanddeath]

I'm sick of backing down from telling you
Once and for all
That I CAN'T take it anymore

Three times now
Three times you've made me cry hours on end, three times you've kept me up at night, three times
Three times I've forgiven you, three times I've tried to forget
But I can't it anymore
I just CAN'T

Because not only are you hurting ME now
But your making me hurt my FRIEND
FRIEND, do you even know what that word means anymore?
This is bull shit
This is absurd

I should've done this earlier, but I backed down again and again
But this
THIS is the last straw
Cause now your making ME lose a valuable friend

Now your making me take my FEELINGS out on my friend
Now your making me act kind of like YOU have to me
And just knowing I've kind of been doing that now
Makes me sick to my stomach

Because I know what it feels like
To be treated like crap
To have your feelings not be considered
Because thats what you've been doing to me

I should've done sooner what my friend is telling me now
That if your gonna treat me like crap
Then I can't be your friend
But unlike my friend is doing now for me thankfully
I'm not going to give you another chance
Because I've already given you enough

Three times that I can remember
But I know its been more
I'm sick of being hurt
Of being mistreated

So now I'll leave you behind
And try to forget and not regret
This all

If you really cared you'd consider my feelings
But of course not
Because I don't matter
Because in the end
Its all about YOU

[butchiesmom]

I wasn't sure what to say here. I wasn't sure whether to comment on how wonderfully clear you write, whether to comment on the mistakes I can clearly see, or on the subject of the poem. I've decided to do all three.

First, you write incredibly clear. I'm not saying it's because you're fifteen, but because there are a lot, and I mean a lot, of adults who have been writing for years who have not reached this level of writing skill. Trust me, I've read their work, lol. (Not on this site, of course, lol)

Second, I'll comment on the 'mistakes' I found in a minute, lol.

Third, the subject of this poem. You have a learned a valuable lesson some adults never learn! I applaud the maturity shown here! I am so proud of you, in so many ways, of learning what a true friend is and when it's time to stop giving another chance! You fill my heart with the hope that other teenagers, my granddaughter included, will be able to learn this valuable lesson before they reach adulthood. Perhaps the world would be a safer place if that happened.

Back to the suggestions...I've bolded all the suggestions...

Three times now
Three times you've made me cry hours on end,
three times you've kept me up at night, three times
Three times I've forgiven you, three times I've tried to forget
But I can't (forget or take) it anymore (you've forgotten a word here)
I just CAN'T

But you're making me hurt my FRIEND

This is bullshit

Cause now you're making

Now you're making me take my FEELINGS out on my friend
Now you're making me act kind of like YOU have to me

Because that's what

That if you're gonna treat me like crap

I made the suggestions because they distract this reader when reading your work. The flow is great, the spelling terrific and the subject is clear. Emotions fairly radiate from the screen! You did a fantastic job, Megan! Bravo!

hugs,
Gail