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Old 06-27-2006, 06:27 PM   #1 (permalink)
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I stand face to face
Looking at eyes like mine.
Emotions showing on her quiet face,
So quiet I would have missed her
Had she not seemed so like me.

I reached forward to touch her
Because I can’t believe what I’m seeing.
Never have I known anyone
Who feels the things I feel so fully.

Her eyes are so sad.
It’s as if something is missing in them…
Light! That’s it!
Her eyes don’t have the light of life in them.
I wonder what happened to extinguish it.
To put out the twinkle in those big brown eyes.

She looks away shyly as I examine her face.
I don’t think she likes being stared at.

Too much attention maybe?

She really should smile,
I bet she has a nice one.
A frown makes a person look so much older.

Sigh…

As I turn to walk away
I take one last look at her…

“I really should get that hair cut.”

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Old 06-27-2006, 07:54 PM   #2 (permalink)
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wow...i was really diggin this piece...i like the disconnected introspection...very interesting...watching yourself from within yourself...great piece...
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Old 06-27-2006, 08:07 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Wow is right. Woman in the mirror perhaps, doing a self-examination of one's own thoughts. Love the word play, kept me intrigued. Excellent piece!!!


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Old 06-27-2006, 10:16 PM   #4 (permalink)
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She really should smile,
I bet she has a nice one.
A frown makes a person look so much older.

Sigh…

As I turn to walk away
I take one last look at her…

“I really should get that hair cut.”
Hey SHAWNIE - this is quite the fabulous introspective... It's as if your viewing what should be "20/20 hindsite" Very nice wordplay within... The last line made me laugh in a "damn - I know this feeling o-so well" kinda way.

Very nice piece of writing - Thanx for sharing it!

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Old 07-12-2006, 11:54 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Sorry about the delay in thanking you guys. Been real busy... playin games! LOL Seriously, I do appreciate all the kind words and feedback. It helps me grow.
 

Old 12-08-2006, 11:25 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Shawnie...wow...I think all of us have been there...searching that person standing in front of us...even wondering what other people see. I loved it!

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