GARDEN SNACK

alanmdouglas · 08-31-2006, 12:22 PM

GARDEN SNACK

Beneath my weeping willow, all in white,
there sits a lady with a spread of tea;
her summery hat guarantees appetite,
while for comfort, there's a tiny hint of breeze.

All-devouring, this interest in the food,
as each twee sandwich neatly bites the dust;
fine china tinkles, stirred by silver spoon,
a simple scene that’s simply fuelled - by lust.

Oh come, my friends, you know the food chain well :
the simplest makes the complex to survive,
anything less would be Darwinian hell,
and bait is best while it is still alive.

I feel I must intrude, nay, I usurp
this scene, gobble her up, smack lips, and burp ....

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Written to a picture of a lady taking tea alone in a garden.

Amzy · 08-31-2006, 01:16 PM

I love this twist. Excellently written. Though I wonder...how does the summery hat gaurantee an appetite?

alanmdouglas · 08-31-2006, 02:28 PM

Dear Amzy,

Well now, speaking as the "voice" of the poem, the garden, the hat simply adds that final flourish that gets the juices flowing !

Thanks for your lovely comments.

Love
Alan

MsJacquiiC · 08-31-2006, 02:43 PM

Hey ALAN - After reading this poem I really felt the need to type -----> insert witty retort here <----- Anyway nice read - I love the subtle humor in your piece...

The very last lines had me smiling in an insane kinda way - but as the saying goes - A smile is but a smile - Always nice to smile LOL

Thanx for sharing this poem
Please do tell of the silver spoon though
And the lust LOL - Nice read thanx

Jacquii.

alanmdouglas · 08-31-2006, 03:13 PM

Dear Jacquii,

I do have a terrible problem when writing, and that is keeping a straight face, even when I want to - so I guess you'll get used to my ending twists !

Thanks for your lovely comments too !

Love
Alan

Altree94 · 08-31-2006, 11:40 PM

Dear Alan;
Love this! Makes me want to run right out and purchase a hat! Seriously though, it has a great beat, good rhymes and a unique point of view. Most people viewing that same picture probably would not think of the lady as part of the food chain! Nice twist!

alanmdouglas · 09-01-2006, 02:45 AM

Dear Tree,

Well thank you - so you have a fetish about being eaten ? lol.

Re the twist, thatI'm afraid is a characteristic of my writing - I love seeing and writing things "sideways" !

Love
Alan