Miscellaneous:

[lil Flow]

now, I know that time is useless

unannounce to me the past is permanent.

who knew that tomorow I'd be walking into my future,

scared, blank expression,

excitement pulsing in my vains.

ambition.

can you see the anticapation buring in my eyes?

lit with the joy on my mothers face as the camera flashes.

graduation, a celebration of the end of what once was a begining, now transformed into a new page.

written is the testomony of gods promise to give me forever lasting life,

and yet here I stand with diploma in hand,

surronded by the excitement of a roaring Khol center,

thousands of faces, painted with love and pride,

and I stand her for the camera,

alone.

For the rest of my life I will for ever be, one soul, instantly binded to my own personal momentum.

I am now left here in the ellumination of the flash to pounder if i am capable of being me, all by myself.

forever my mothers child.

fighting the bonds of her nurturing hands,

to be alone and walk.

like I walked today, tassel swaying...

as if an enfants first steps, i did it,

alone

[alanmdouglas]

Dear Lil,

MY daughter graduated this July too, and tho I never went that way myself, I can see in your words exactly what she went through.

Same applies to this poem - I would love to offer some minor thoughts to polish it up, so would you like to post it in the Crit forum ?

You have a good poet's vision, what you see and observe you put down on paper very well, but there are some pointers which a more experienced poet might be able to help you with. I've been writing since you were 5 years old !

Love
Alan