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Homewrecker With A Heart Of Gold

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Old 02-13-2008, 11:40 AM   #1 (permalink)
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I'm a sight for sore eyes
Just as well my reflection is the only one judging.
Naivity has become my best companion
From the moment you told me your mind only pictures me.
Hanging by tenterhooks every time her name comes into conversation.
Were you thinking of me when you were fucking her?
Step on my toes as I dance my way through your guilt.
Fidelity is wearing thin
Which is why you haven't slept for days.
 

Old 03-03-2008, 02:35 PM   #2 (permalink)
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'Were you thinking of me when you were fucking her?
Step on my toes as I dance my way through your guilt.'

Amazing, I love the bluntness you have here, mixed with the delicate imagery. Its really effective. I've read this a few times through now, and I'm still trying to work out whether you're appreciating this attention, my feeling is that you are, correct me if I'm wrong?
Intriguing xx
 

Old 04-15-2008, 07:44 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Thank for for reading and commenting
I'm finding it hard to put into words, but here goes... Although the person's whose point of view this poem is from is appreciating the attention, they are aware that something isn't right in the relationship and so do not feel fully content.
Hope that helps

Flook x
 

Old 04-15-2008, 09:28 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Step on my toes as I dance my way through your guilt.
This line is fantastic and says it all! I love it!

I can't say I've been on this side of an illicit affair, but can say I was damned close! It's hard to imagine why a woman would mess with another woman's man but it happens. This look into that side helps.

Thank you for taking the time to write and post this.

hugs,
Gail
 

Old 04-16-2008, 01:47 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Dear Flook,

This is beautiful, dance my way through your guilt, that is a beautiful line. Beautiful words, I love this poem. Thank you for sharing. Your words inspire me. A poem for you is coming.
Eric
 

Old 05-23-2008, 09:07 PM   #6 (permalink)
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thank you all for you kindness (:
flook x
 

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...aaand...She scores again!!! another Home Run! You certainly pack a punch within a few lines, showing us different points of view...always solidly jammed with conflicting emotions. Love it! I gave this one an Excellent rating!

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