Miscellaneous:

[erikestabrook]

I am new here, but sometimes dead by True Blue inspired me to share, this is very special part of my life, so I urge you not to let this poem go out of this room because it is my latest from what is to become a book

You can't have me suffering,
I won't have much left if I let this take me over as it has so many times,
Your going to take the oil of my mistakes and throw it on me,
its all led to this I can't let you win,
this is more than life or death, it's will my soul be kept even later than after all this mess expires, this elation makes me tired,
I see them all hanging on wires,

I get a grip, does it still lead me down?,
all this santuary, is just a burial ground,
Their is no land that isn't tainted by the blood or the treason,
and your stuck to make your own truth,
while I'm buried by the reason,
I need some sign to stay in my mind, separate this
injustice while you make the villains trust us,
Its more than a war inside,
Its a war on principals,
Its a war on society,
just look me in the eye and tell me why I was left behind,
we can't see enough to believe in the truth,
that we were labeled the easiest to abuse,
since your misuse of the parliamentary aim,
I have no choice but to beat you at your own game,
I see you hanging on wires,

This life I was cursed with seems to expire,
While I snuffed out the serpeant, the Devil never tires,
There's only one way out, and its past the jungle of reciters,
who speak like they know the truth, but with so much misuse,
I choose to be one with the higher.

[PaintedDiary]

Dear Erik,
What I am reading is extraordinary. You are so young and write with such power and onmipotence! What was your inspiration for such a piece? I see the language you have chosen is from way down in your abyss, the abyss of your mind, and the abyss of your soul. In my interpretation, this poem reads like you are also talking from the window of the soul of someone from a past life to me. How dark, mystical, and intriguing!!!! The imagery that is painted is reminiscent of the old colonial days of triumph, war, battle, constitutional rights, blood, fear, and tears. Like Kng, so young, and so AMAZINGLY TALENTED!!!!! As you said, this is your life, that you have scribed, and this poem puts the audience right into the pain, the fear, and the feeling of how, you will not let it get you down, or Hellbound, and the answer lies in your last line. Amongst the many, many layers that unfold like fine linen within this poem, that last line makes me stand up Erik...

I choose to be one with the higher.

I love how you tied it all together, gave the reader somthing to ponder as if there is a part 2 perhaps.....and there is, since this is your life, a book, your write!! Bravo!!! Your first write is a smash success in my book, less our minor difficulties in the beginning. Take Care.

Painted aka Kimberly

[erikestabrook]

Thanks so much Kimberly I can't belive how analytical, friendly and pleasing your reactions are, this poem has left me with a dilema in my book though its only the 40th page and it has death clearly written in their so should I make it the ending or just write how I feel ignoring the fact that I killed myself
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actually it doesn't mean I've killed myself necessarilly so I think i iwll continue with it and leave it in its spot in the book

[MsJacquiiC]

WHOA!
1st - welcome to the JPiC Community ERIK
2nd - You have entered the arena slinging poetic bombs of insight. This poem makes one look at self and smile with the knowledge of it!

The Following Text Is Quoted:

just look me in the eye and tell me why I was left behind,
we can't see enough to believe in the truth,
that we were labeled the easiest to abuse,
since your misuse of the parliamentary aim,
I have no choice but to beat you at your own game,
I see you hanging on wires,

That repetitive line "I see you hanging on wires" That is a powerful powerful piece of imagery - It speaks to me of strength... A strength in knowing the concept of 'karma' ----> yeah - this piece is really nice!

But within the highlighted stanza - The line: "I have no choice, but to beat you at your own game" that line is poetic gold - I want that for my own & I'm a silver fan - ya dig! Yeah - the rhythm of this piece makes me want to say that I wrote it - It begs for some kind of claiming of sorts & it's a powerful piece of writing for me to want to claim it

You did your thing very well with this poem! I am liking your style!
Thanx for sharing!

Jacquii.

[erikestabrook]

Thanks a whole lot Jacqui, yeah as i said this is a very secretive part of myself but you have made sharing it with you so splendid, its all mine lady fingers outta the pudding can't have lol

[erikestabrook]

Hi I liked getting responses from ms.Jaqui an dpainted so much but owuld like to know someone else from here please