As I Wait For the Bus

butchiesmom · 02-20-2011, 01:10 AM

Snow falls on me, around me
Adding another layer of insulation
Against the cold for spring’s growth
As I wait for the bus.

A bird flies from one branch to another
One chirp, then two piercing the quiet

A car passes by its engine muted
Slush hissing at the tires as it passes by
Snowflakes dancing in its wake
as I wait for the bus.

© copyright Gail Deemer 2011

Azekiel-Horizon · 02-20-2011, 01:38 AM

Hi how are you? The imagery of this poem reminded me of Ernest Hemingway. The way your words painted the picture in my mind was ill. Just with a few words you place an entire world before me. I was really amazed at how such a short poem could display such imagery. Very nice of work. keep dropping gems like this

butchiesmom · 02-20-2011, 02:12 AM

Thanks so much! I've had this image in my head since that day over a month ago. I described it to MsJ and she suggested writing about it. I usually like prose but this seemed to fit it so much better.
Again, thanks for the comment.
hugs,
Gail

jakeminick · 02-20-2011, 07:47 PM

i like it. it makes me smell snow...and im in florida. kind of miss it now.

MsJacquiiC · 02-22-2011, 08:48 AM

A lovely tranquil write Big Sis! It's funny, because the image of waiting for the bus is like "hustle & bustle" to me = like a bit of city madness, even the country bus scene can have it's hectic bit of excitement... But you set a scene of solitude.

I wrote a poem some time ago in which I used the phrase "la-di-da happiness" -- and this poem epitomizes the concept. So carefree and easy, without a worry in the world, even though the damn bus may be late LOL - Anyway - A lovely write Gail = Thanks for the share!

Jacquii.

butchiesmom · 02-22-2011, 10:59 PM

Woohoo! I'm so glad you liked it, lil sis! It was such a peaceful day, something I haven't forgotten. It still brings forth a special feeling when I think of it.
I hope Kimberly and others will take the time to feel is as well.

much hugs, lil sis!
Gail

butchiesmom · 03-06-2011, 11:09 PM

What I didn't think to add until now is that I did feel as if I was the only person in the world then. Snowflakes falling all around me blanketing the world in a hush and even the one bird who dared to venture a few chirps went back into its hideaway because it got no replies.

Such a lovely feeling, the kind of quiet a snowfall brings.

hugs
Gail

MsJacquiiC · 03-07-2011, 03:34 PM

Yes indeed - I always think of winter as the "silent season" especially when snow is concerned. It can be quite magical & majestic watching a really busy snowfall. And as opposed to a thunderstorm all the noise, snow is silently beautiful - if that makes sense....

butchiesmom · 03-09-2011, 07:22 PM

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Originally Posted by MsJacquiiC

Yes indeed - I always think of winter as the "silent season" especially when snow is concerned. It can be quite magical & majestic watching a really busy snowfall. And as opposed to a thunderstorm all the noise, snow is silently beautiful - if that makes sense....

That's exactly the way to describe it! I stood on our deck, one snowy day, and the silence was overwhelming. I can usually hear cars on the main road about two miles away but this day it was nothing but silence. I was alone under a silent quilt of white and loved it! Too bad snow has to be so damned cold, lmao.

MsJacquiiC · 03-09-2011, 11:18 PM

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Originally Posted by butchiesmom

Too bad snow has to be so damned cold, lmao.

lol - so true!