Inside Out

PaintedDiary · 09:35 PM

Inside Out

No ersatz veil to shadow my depth
once sotto voce, now a gravitas vignette
shards of menagerie mirrors reflect
the real me, no mask, and not perfect

PD

Curtis Spider Lee · 03-22-2008, 08:11 PM

At last a true test to my vocabulary power my Sister! Wow...OMG, it tis "Shockingly Sad." You have captured the elements of sadness till it itself seem to become forsaken from within itself. Another " Brilliant Write!" Painted One- Love Ya Big Sister!

PaintedDiary · 04:34 PM

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Originally Posted by Curtis Spider Lee

At last a true test to my vocabulary power my Sister! Wow...OMG, it tis "Shockingly Sad." You have captured the elements of sadness till it itself seem to become forsaken from within itself. Another " Brilliant Write!" Painted One- Love Ya Big Sister!

Thank you so much lil' brother...when I wrote this I was reading about Poe's and Chopin's lives and other things...and this was one result of that. I will call you and love you too

!

Kim

Mysty · 03-23-2008, 08:13 PM

Truly ..... You have captured the essence of sadness...... self doubt must look like this.. because we never do feel perfect do we?..

Beautiful write Kim.

Love ya Sis

Mysty

PaintedDiary · 03-24-2008, 04:44 PM

Dear Mysty,

Thank you sooo much for taking precious time to read and to comment. You are so right. We never do feel perfect, yet some place in a category as such. I am so happy you liked this write.

Love You Too Sis!

Kim

butchiesmom · 03-24-2008, 09:54 PM

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Originally Posted by PaintedDiary

No ersatz veil to shadow my depth
once sotto voce, now a gravitas vignette
shards of menagerie mirrors reflect
the real me, no mask, and not perfect

Kim, honestly, the first time I read this my first reaction was I needed a dictionary. I was also in the process of cleaning and getting ready for my mom to visit for Easter and distracted so I decided to wait to comment on it.

Now I'm commenting! Got the dictionary out and couldn't find gravitas! Soooo I googled it and found out it was a depth of character (more or less) and thought this was so like you! I've always felt there's more to Kim than meets the eye and considering how deep I thought you were to begin with....wow, what a well!

Anyway, this describes you so perfectly! I'm so glad I was able to come back tonight and really enjoy it!

lubya Sis!
Gail

PaintedDiary · 03-25-2008, 06:33 PM

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Originally Posted by butchiesmom

Kim, honestly, the first time I read this my first reaction was I needed a dictionary. I was also in the process of cleaning and getting ready for my mom to visit for Easter and distracted so I decided to wait to comment on it.

Now I'm commenting! Got the dictionary out and couldn't find gravitas! Soooo I googled it and found out it was a depth of character (more or less) and thought this was so like you! I've always felt there's more to Kim than meets the eye and considering how deep I thought you were to begin with....wow, what a well!

Anyway, this describes you so perfectly! I'm so glad I was able to come back tonight and really enjoy it!

lubya Sis!
Gail

Dear Gail,

Thank you so much for taking precious time to read, research, and comment! Yes....there are many many layers and you hit it on the nail. Your comments are always ever so positive and uplifting...I love to read them. I am so happy you enjoyed this lil' poem of mine.

Love ya Sis!

Kim

erikestabrook · 03-29-2008, 02:51 PM

just amazing Kim,

such advanced language,
yet stil a cohesive message,
and a beautiful one,

send this to the higher ups

solo · 03-29-2008, 03:09 PM

to have a good vocabulary is a matter of perseverence ....to use it with such elegance is a gift....

love it!!!!

PaintedDiary · 03-30-2008, 08:40 AM

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Originally Posted by erikestabrook

just amazing Kim,

such advanced language,
yet stil a cohesive message,
and a beautiful one,

send this to the higher ups

Dear Erik,

Thank you so much for taking time to read and to comment. I am most grateful. I really felt this was cohesive, yet was concerned of the message not being absorbed because of the wording. However, when I looked back after writing..there were no other words I would have chosen. Thank you Erik and I will take your advice...I never thought to submit this...now I will.

Kim