Insomnia

JONATHAN · 08-13-2007, 12:58 AM

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Originally Posted by mangodroplet

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I really don't know if i should feel this way...
but this poem entertained me...
I really enjoyed it...
O.o
your style of writing is great....and so much fun to read!
Loved:

For insomnia has imprisoned me,
has been prodding , poking and taunting me .
This consciousness , this stark reality ,
yes ! insomnia has imprisoned me .

It....just was a great way to talked about insomnia...
Makes me wanna kinda chuckle too....
to think of insomnia poking and prodding...but it's true! AHHH i don't know why i'm laughing...
but when something is good...i sometimes start to laugh. Like i started to laugh when reading the beginning of CS Lewis's Mere Christianity..
man. i have a weird sense of humor.
BUT IT MEANS GREAT JOB! *huggles*

I didnt intend for this poem to be funny but im glad i tickled ure funny bone as unintentional as it was ... take care sweetpea ...CHESTER

mangodroplet · 08-13-2007, 01:49 AM

haha.
i'm weird xD
CONGRATS on turning blue!
xD

PaintedDiary · 08-15-2007, 12:00 PM

Dear Jonathan,

Allot of emotion from the abyss welled up in this as well. Beautifully executed and I can relate to so much in this piece. As I stated when I first read this it was 4 o'clock in the morning so I was definitely experiencing it as well! In the wee hours of the morn or the wee hours of pressing issues, we can often experience this. You have been dealing with allot and dealing well by the screen, but I think your poetry speaks for itself. Always alive with emotion, passion, and truth. Thank you for sharing this.

Kim

JONATHAN · 08-16-2007, 10:34 AM

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Originally Posted by PaintedDiary

Dear Jonathan,

Allot of emotion from the abyss welled up in this as well. Beautifully executed and I can relate to so much in this piece. As I stated when I first read this it was 4 o'clock in the morning so I was definitely experiencing it as well! In the wee hours of the morn or the wee hours of pressing issues, we can often experience this. You have been dealing with allot and dealing well by the screen, but I think your poetry speaks for itself. Always alive with emotion, passion, and truth. Thank you for sharing this.

Kim

Dear Kim .... thank yu frm way down for reading and commenting on this piece ... im glad yu identify with this poem and wot its all about ... maybe thats y we all write so that thru our words we recieve validation for all our joys and pains ..thanx again sweetpea
CHESTER

MsJacquiiC · 08-28-2007, 01:58 AM

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For insomnia has imprisoned me,
has been prodding , poking and taunting me .
This consciousness , this stark reality ,
yes ! insomnia has imprisoned me .

Hey JON - a pleasurable read! I love your use of simile and metaphor throughout... But for some reason I think the "insomnia" is indeed metaphor for something else LOL - reading into your words - Caressing them... I've never heard insomnia described so very vividly - Love the line: Sleep come kiss my eyelids now , help me escape with my sanity . An interesting plea for help; from despair...

Nice write - A little dark - but vividly filled with imagery.
Makes for a nice read = Thanx for the sharing.

Jacquii.

~Serenity~ · 08-30-2007, 12:08 AM

Hey there Jon! Hmmm I'm feelin this a bit more than I'd like to -- have been having the same problem for close to three weeks now, not fun at all.

BUT! You got a wonderful poem out of this. Wonderfully heartfelt. And I absolutely adore the final verse; it's going to stay with me all night now. Beautifully written, Jon, thank you for sharing!

Smiles!,
~Serenity~

nomadicrhymer · 08-30-2007, 12:29 PM

JON, such a dramatic entrance to segue into a fabulously entertaining piece of poetry!!

The still of this night ,
overwhelming .
The absence of daylight's chaotic chorus ,
torturing .
The darkness in this room ,
blinding .
The anguished cries of my inner being ,
deafening

It grabbed my attention right away and led me down a fascinating lane of superb imagery and words that really held my spirit captured through to the end of the poem.

FABULOUS WRITE!!

Nomad

JONATHAN · 09-17-2007, 01:41 AM

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Originally Posted by MsJacquiiC

Hey JON - a pleasurable read! I love your use of simile and metaphor throughout... But for some reason I think the "insomnia" is indeed metaphor for something else LOL - reading into your words - Caressing them... I've never heard insomnia described so very vividly - Love the line: Sleep come kiss my eyelids now , help me escape with my sanity . An interesting plea for help; from despair...

Nice write - A little dark - but vividly filled with imagery.
Makes for a nice read = Thanx for the sharing.

Jacquii.

Dark ... hmm .. I guess I just hav my dark moments like everyone else and I feel compelled to put them down into poetry .. isnt it sadness that draws out a bigger reaction , I think somewhere or the other we're all a bit melodramatic ... and thats so classic Hollywood , anyway this poem was written duering tough tough times and Im glad I could translate that pain into this . Im glad yu liked it mam ... LOVE YU ... Chester

JONATHAN · 09-17-2007, 01:52 AM

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Originally Posted by ~Serenity~

Hey there Jon! Hmmm I'm feelin this a bit more than I'd like to -- have been having the same problem for close to three weeks now, not fun at all.

BUT! You got a wonderful poem out of this. Wonderfully heartfelt. And I absolutely adore the final verse; it's going to stay with me all night now. Beautifully written, Jon, thank you for sharing!

Smiles!,
~Serenity~

Hey ... Serinity .. first and foremost Id like to apologise 4 the delayed responce , that goes for evryone else too . Im glad yu could identify with this poem , Its one the poems that came to me duering one of the worst phases of my life and out here Insomnia meant much more than the physical ... Im glad yu like the final verse coz they say alls well that ends well ..anyway thanx for the reveiw I loved it and pass on my hi's and love yu's to ure Aunt Tree .... Chester

JONATHAN · 09-17-2007, 01:59 AM

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Originally Posted by nomadicrhymer

JON, such a dramatic entrance to segue into a fabulously entertaining piece of poetry!!

The still of this night ,
overwhelming .
The absence of daylight's chaotic chorus ,
torturing .
The darkness in this room ,
blinding .
The anguished cries of my inner being ,
deafening

It grabbed my attention right away and led me down a fascinating lane of superb imagery and words that really held my spirit captured through to the end of the poem.

FABULOUS WRITE!!

Nomad

Hey ... sweetpea , im glad yu liked this write .. pretty intense and dark hhuh ? Im glad my
misery entertains yu .. lol ..just kidding .. kno wot yu really mean , thank yu so much for this great reveiw ... havent told yu I love in such a long time .. Chester