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Old 09-29-2006, 02:12 PM   #1 (permalink)
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A LITTLE LIE ?

As we look up and wonder why
we're who we are, think we don't know,
we tell ourselves a little lie.

We are so small, so big the sky;
thus, who made us, how did we grow,
as we look up and wonder, why ?

So much forgot, reasons to cry,
how could we, did we, sink so low ?
We tell ourselves a little lie.

Forgotten, lost, the skills we try;
could be, we are our own worst foe,
as we look up and wonder why ?

Things we must know before we die :
we are the bakers, not the dough !
We tell ourselves a little lie.

We self-abase, who once were high,
creations made should make us crow :
as we look up and wonder why
we told ourselves that great big lie ....

Alan McAlpine Douglas

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Old 09-29-2006, 06:11 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Alan impactfull suttlety, I found in this that you had to be talking about God,
the scene you captured is one that's a little mistrusing if not dark, comes across as revelation, was nice to read
 

Old 09-29-2006, 06:29 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Dear Erik,

Thank you, but not quite - unless you go by that Robert Heinlein greeting in "Stranger in a Strange Land" : Thou art God !

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Old 09-29-2006, 06:46 PM   #4 (permalink)
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well you masked it well under that cloak what's it about then if you would care to tell me I've reda it five tiems so very inquisitive has my mind been toward this poem
 

Old 09-29-2006, 06:52 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Dear Erik,

Well, I think that we create our own universe, and the forgetting of that is the source of many of the world's ills ....

Does that help ?

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Old 09-29-2006, 07:31 PM   #6 (permalink)
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yes I can see it that way as I make my own world when reveiwing poems
 

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Old 09-29-2006, 07:42 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Dear Erik,

You got it, in, well, two !

A universe is any collection of things, does not only have to be planets and stars etc.

Love
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Old 09-30-2006, 12:52 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Hi Alan!

Nice write, loved the flow of it and how you changed the ending line.

Sounds to me like you are saying that we've forgotten where we came from, so we invented God. The lie is in blaming Him when things go wrong and thanking Him when things are good when the reality is that we should just look at ourselves. It reminds me of the age old question of: Which came first, the chicken or the egg?

From your reply to Erik, I understand that you are not talking about God but each persons universe that they create for themselves. So I guess I see it as relating to God because He is a part of my universe.

Alan, you make me think so deeply, my brain hurts!

Still, I thank you for posting this and am glad I read it!
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Old 09-30-2006, 02:52 AM   #9 (permalink)
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Dear Tree,

Well, thank you for your thoughts. As it happens, that is not quite how I see it, but very close, and indeed has given me a new viewpoint on this, so very well done.

I now fully see how an inclusion of "God" can also work, otherwise your hurt brain has got it spot on, and yes, we should look to ourselves rather than some outside agency by whatever name !

Love
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twos better than not getting it at all, glad you told me Alan
 


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