Miscellaneous:

[jakeminick]

There is something handy
To punishing the cerebral layers in character
Such as
Repeated jabs with a dagger
Through the surface of perspective nebulae
Awakening the unborn circuitry
To be matured
Into philosophical podium weapons
Stabbing face
At the kneecaps of black bile
While leaking the skulls
Of undead shepherds
A sort of
Suicidal optimism
If you will
Envisioned with the conceit
That all this self mutilation
Will leave
An evolutionary scar
On the world

Was that too ugly to be inspirational?

[Azekiel-Horizon]

Damn that was ILL, felt like a freestyle. The flow throughout this was impeccable. Also the concept it had a bit of sarcasm to it especially the last line when you asked the question "was that too ugly to be inspirational". Keep doing your thing bruh

[butchiesmom]

I'm so sorry but just didn't understand this at all. I would appreciate if you could take the time to explain the reasoning behind it so I can comment on it, lol.
Thanks,
Gail

Must be this old brain....

[jakeminick]

i guess the reasoning behind it would be, pushing yourself further into the complexities of existential questions to find something logical and, as soon as something is satisfying, moving on to perturb yourself further. it could also be an illogical addiction to chaos as well. thank you for reading.

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by jakeminick

Was that too ugly to be inspirational?

Is this line part of the poem? Then probably yes - definitely too ugly to be inspirational.

But again - another interestingly abstract perspective from you Jake. I love the conglomerate of seemingly unrelated word combinations: unborn circuitry, podium weapon, black bile.... This is abstract - reminds me of some of my own stuff actually.

It's this type of poetry that you can come back to. Each and everytime - there's a new layer of "truth" revealed, as if this is some sort of unkempt baklava

Surely it makes for an entertaining read. Ha! Some genius once said something about "thoroughly enjoying tasty poems." -- I once said that my poetry is like a ghetto general tsos. Your poetry is an unkempt baklava ==> layers of sweetness, but if you chew just the wrong way on it - you might get a bitter piece of chopped nut LOL. I suppose it's all good - we all like nuts in our own way, unless of course we're allergic, which thank goodness I am not.

Anyway - I'm blathering hahaha - I'll end by saying ==> Thanks for the share!

Jacquii.

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The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by jakeminick

pushing yourself further into the complexities of existential questions to find something logical and, as soon as something is satisfying, moving on to perturb yourself further.

Using this logic - one might entitle the piece "Glutton For Punishment" instead of Masochism -- Very similiar in concept -- But quite different in context