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[[Beautiful+Danger]]

My Friend, The Shadow

Nothing more than a mere figment
But as my friend and i play
I feel happiness flush through my body.

This person, so real to my eyes
Follows me, jumps with me
Mimics my every move.

She comes with me to school
She is shy in the classroom
She hides.

I attempt to draw her back
But she doesn't respond.

I begin to coax her from her hideaway
But the other children scold.

Who are you talking to
If you'd be so kind
There's no-one beside you
You're out of your mind!

Tears start to fall and i tell them off
Of course she's there
And i run outside to the playground.

I scream at them There!
See, i told you she's with me
Can't you see her? She's clear as day!

But the children just laugh
And they point and they taunt.

Of course she's there
The sun is high
But look at her now
When Mr Sun in the sky
Goes for a wander behind that cloud!
Oh you're going to be ever so proud!

So i turn very slowly
And i stare at the ground
As the sunshine vanishes.

My friend slowly fades
Away, into the earth
Nothing more than a shadow.

Without getting all technical, I must say that I like this piece very much. it's a picture of youth. well done!



Paul

[[Beautiful+Danger]]

Thanks yeah i like it. Hey Poetical, are you on any other large Poetry websites? I know someone with your username...

[MsJacquiiC]

"other" large sites = insinuates that JPiC is amongst them
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Hey BEAUTIFUL - this poem is nicely scribed - enjoyed this one very much. I recall you posting the movie Donnie Darko... This poem reminds me of that movie except I think your poem is much more beautiful LOL - I can relate to this poem... Had a difficult time relating to Donnie Darko.

At anyrate - I notice you've made a clear distinction between "I" and "i" I don't think it's typo - so can you please explain that?

Beautiful piece of writing, as the "children" have scolded me in quite the same way as well LOL - Seems poetry is freeing to say the least.

Thanx for sharing this poem with us!

Jacquii.

[[Beautiful+Danger]]

Lol thanks for your comments. About the I and i thing, i think it was just how i type lol sorry. I don't think there was any hidden meaning to it. But thanks for noticing

You are very welcome for the reply Beautiful + Danger, and yes I am a menber of The Poets Forum/Poetry junction also Admin there, we do have over 1100 member so I suppose it could be called large.

Nice writing




Paul

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by [Beautiful+Danger]

Lol thanks for your comments. About the I and i thing, i think it was just how i type lol sorry. I don't think there was any hidden meaning to it. But thanks for noticing

DAMN! I was hoping for some sort of secret meaning...
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ALSO 1100 MEMBERS?????? WHOA!
That is seriously AWESOME!
Must be nice

Jacquii.

[[Beautiful+Danger]]

LoL sorry about that!