Miscellaneous:

[PaintedDiary]

My Guitar Love III

There was a knock at my door. No one was there. At the foot of my door rested a box wrapped in purple velvet. Inside laid a small purple bottle with a scroll of fine imported Italian parchment, tied with a ribbon and sealed with a cork. The bottle was embedded in a sea of purple rose petals and a medley of amethyst crystal potpourri. The scroll had a sketch of a guitar with a message. The message was fragrant as new born hyacinths and said, “You have given me the passion to play again…. gratzi…. meet me at 7 pm.” The scent of him lingered upon my mind that entire day.

At 7 pm, I walked into his club and there he was in the middle of the dance floor. It was just he and I. My Salvador. I swayed to him feeling like a butterfly of chocolate iridescence. I kissed him on his cheek, and thanked him for the invitation. At the instance of my kiss, the lights dimmed and music began to play. The music was an instrumental of Salvador strumming his guitar. The music sounded like his most romantic and satisfying magnum opus. He extended his hand inviting me to place mine in his. He spun me around like a ballerina performing a pirouette. Purple rose petals fell from the ceiling all around us…. twas breathtaking. When I made the full turn to face him again, he held me tightly against a pulsating masculine perfection that I had been so longing for.

Salvador whispered, telling me to look into his eyes. As I drowned in his ebony pools he continued softly telling me "I want to show you how I feel when I play my guitar for you." The sequins on my dress somehow seemed to melt away and my mind centered on unladylike lustful thoughts as he slid one leg between to slightly part mine. Ever so gently his mani lente began to…dance. Every fiber of me was woven in the ebb and flow of nocturnal vibrations. I became his guitar. That night we even defied gravity.

PD

p.s. mani lente means slow hands in Italian

p.p.s. Guitar Love I and II can be found here...http://jpicforum.info/miscellaneous/...e-ii-3300.html

[Kit Carson]

Kim, I went back and re-read part I and II and was surprized that i hadn't commented on it. I must have done it in a PM like this, i am sorry to not get it on record. all three of these are very good! I like the way you present these in different styles and takes, keeps them fresh and new. You say publish...where? I do see a typo though: I think this: sequence
should have been sequins? Other than that, it is marvelous, simply marvelous.

[PaintedDiary]

Thanks Kit......and you are right I had a typo indeed, lololol. Thank you for taking time to read and comment. I hope this series goes over well. I will keep you posted!!! Love ya!!

I am going to submit this series Kit and I will keep you posted, wish me luck! lol

Kim

[Yuuko]

This is great, three paragraphs of vivid, synesthetic images that managed to crawl under my skin....Wonderful ^^

[PaintedDiary]

Thank you so much Yuuko for taking time to read and to comment. I am honored. You have a brilliant poem posted and I see you are one to watch as well. Thank you again. Love ya!

Kim

[MsJacquiiC]

Oh my! There are some really solid images in this piece KIM! Sensual to say the very least - and even though you use the phrase "unladylike lustful thoughts" - I didn't sense any bit of lust involved in this poetic love affair

Anyway - a very nice prose piece... And the use of metaphor and simile is performed quite well - executed deliciously one might say. Some of my favorite lines:

• The message was fragrant as new born hyacinths
• I swayed to him feeling like a butterfly of chocolate iridescence.
• Every fiber of me was woven in the ebb and flow of nocturnal vibrations.

Excellent poem!
Thanx for sharing!

Jacquii.

[PaintedDiary]

Awwwww Thank you Ms Jacquii for taking time to read and comment. I am honored and love your multi-colored commentary! I wanted to mix them and try a different approach for this one and chose a prose piece. I am so glad you enjoyed this. Love Ya!

Kim
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Dear Mysty,

I wanted to thank you for helping me smooth out this piece as I incorporated ALL your suggestions and it is wonderful! Thank you so much for your help and support! Love ya!

Kim

[zaac]

this is very different from what i expected. i was expecting a rhythmic poem. i like it though

zaac

[Mysty]

Kim it was my pleasure helping you out This is a really good piece and I do so enjoy your sensual ones. This format is different but I love how you used it to all your advantages. Well Done !! *hugs*

Love Ya

Mysty

[MsJacquiiC]

Hey MS GIRL - you KNOW I'm all about my rainbow
But truly: fragrant as new born hyacinths ---- That line was most gorgeous to me! One of my favorite flowers is the hyacinth - the other is honeysuckle, though I'm not sure it's actually classified as a flower - I think perhaps it's a bush.... Anyway - poem is delicious! Loved it very much actually! And again thanx for the sharing

Jacquii.